Iceknith

I think you meant "since he *did* not *know*'

I think you meant "to 18H" and not "too 18H"

I don't know if "whole of today" is an error or a valid expression, but I sure don't know it, and it seems odd

I think you meant "while look*ing* down"

I think you forgot to erase the "climbed on top of it", because now it spells "climbed it climbed on top of it like a cat"

I think you meant "running like *a* beast"

Sorry to be always so negative about, an otherwise great story, but wouldn't it be better to not repeat "absurdly" in this paragraph. You could maybe replace one of them with an "extremely" or "gigantic"

I think you forgot the "head" in "she lowered her *head*, which was covered..."

furthermore, I don't know if you meant "twister form" or "twisted shape"

I think you meant "replacing *it* with her..."