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  • Ecargmura
    Ecargmuraa year ago
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    nice chapter

  • Ecargmura
    Ecargmuraa year ago
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    I get an "end of the world" dystopian vibe from this chapter's setting.

  • Ecargmura
    Ecargmuraa year ago
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    Is this like a futuristic fantasy setting of sorts?

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    Ecargmuraa year ago
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    The device can materialize food, but it has to be inside a storage. Food is limited in a journey, hence why he eventually ran out and had to munch on magical ice cubes and snow.

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    Ecargmuraa year ago
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    I don't mind as long as it's good

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  • Ecargmura
    Ecargmuraa year ago
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    I think you should be consistent with the name changes. If Akio is now Seo-Jin, you should keep on using Seo-jin instead of Akio. I noticed you keep using Akio, his previous life's name, in this new world where he got reincarnated. I think it would be best if you give Yuna and Ayaka some personality. I'm curious about how trandescence magic works.

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  • Ecargmura
    Ecargmuraa year ago
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    AH! HE'S SEO-JIN IN THIS WORLD, NOT AKIO!

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  • Ecargmura
    Ecargmuraa year ago
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    This chapter is a little longer than your previous ones. It's okay. I like long chapters. This one is a bit more descriptive with the magic system and such. I'm quite curious about the weaknesses of Transdescence, Null and Tear magics.

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    Ecargmuraa year ago
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    Sorry, a little nitpick since I'm Korean, but Korean surnames are always one or two syllables and then their two or three syllable given name. Haneul-Seong is a bit inconsistent. That would mean Haneul would be his surname, which is not an actual surname. Seong is okay as either a surname or a given name. Is his given name Haneul and his last name Seong? If so, there's no need for the hyphen in the middle. You can do Seong Haneul or Seong Ha-neul if you want to use it the Eastern way. If you want to write it the Western way, it should be Haneul Seong without the hyphen.

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    Ecargmuraa year ago
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    Previous life has a Japanese name. Reincarnated life has a Korean name. The companion spirit has a Japanese name. The setting feels like a Western fantasy with RPG elements. I'm not too familiar with isekai novels, but I do want you to be more descriptive with characters. What does Noroi look like? What does Seo-jin look like? Where is he exactly? You did a good job building up the fact that he's in a new world.

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