Benton_Marcum
Lv13
2021-07-12 BeigetretenUnited States
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Benton_Marcum2yrKommentiertBro-refine this sentence. you are stating the obvious and something you already alluded to
Stage three weapons seemed to be only one level higher than stage two, but with the difference of three levels of quality, the forging difficulty was obvious, this was also a newbie who had just forged his first weapon less than a week ago.- Benton_Marcum2yrKommentiert
That was very abrupt him leaving. this should have been set up after he helped forge all the stage two swords
After this departure, he did not know when they would meet again, Ye Feng could not help but feel a little reluctant about it. - Benton_Marcum2yrKommentiert
Yeah this clues in that the author wanted to move on With the story
Forging was his main concern now. - Benton_Marcum2yrKommentiert
Yeah That should be edited.
"Brother Ye Feng, when did you become so amazing?" - Benton_Marcum2yrKommentiert
You change from third to fIrst person way too much. keep to one tone
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