Mordou24

So a meteor dropped on the ninja world at light speed and yet the world was fine . Yeah , bullshit.

Either they mercilessly* they do both *

I don't think making 100 Lay-ups is that time consuming or physically straining . I used to play basket in my teens and making 100 lay-ups would take less than 30 minutes

Vitamin D. Sun

the dialogues felt a bit , restricted . usually people say more than Aaah , fuck . try adding more

The idea is good , the story seems nice and promising but I can't really say that the end result is THAT good . I mean , I know that the MC is 16 years old mentally but still . He summons troops all the time , with weak excuses , there is no mention of how they look after themselves , as having a 100 (and still growing) party of knights would need a lot of supplies . And it feels like the some characters have different personalities to fit the MC

jokmh njhgvhbm.

I don't think Charles will remember Harry anyway , unless other people speak of his "brother that vanished"

Feels like the Mc just became Ashley's bitch for no reason. They are the same yes, they can become friends , yes , but why the fk is he just following all her orders? It is annoying af .