ANIMESHNIK_TOPCHIK

in honor of interesting stimulants with an interesting plot

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Well, in short, like a classic. 1) the whole world was created for the main character; 2) not a very smart main character, who after moving to the magical world did not study magic and somehow develop his talent, since this is a "magical world" and all the "nonsense" that he spews supposedly does not apply to him (especially at the beginning, when he just finds out that there is natural and ritual magic and what the hell did he do if he was a teacher at a magic academy for a whole year?); 3) the main character gave up and did not even think briefly about the essence of the system; 4) 10 spells were invented in 1000 years? No, well, the creativity and stupidity of people all over the world apparently breaks the boundaries and how do they survive in the magical world, oh no, this world was created only for the main character; 5) in short, typical Chinese stuff, the characters and the main character are thin as cardboard. 6) purely to kill time while reading it will do, but nothing serious, it will do for beginners. (I am writing this after reading the first few chapters and it has already given me this conclusion and prediction based on my extensive experience)

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if anything there is a very big plot hole, like damn instantly (in a day) this organization of killers found MC in the most isolated and strong pantheon, without having information about appearance (remember that in front of the devils he was in a mask) find him and attack? also it seems to me too submissive is the mother of Raiser and Ravel when her clan is the richest clan in the devil world, if rich then it must be strong to keep this wealth. the level of power is somehow underestimated for the personal guards of the Phenex to protect the richest clan. author, for a beginner in writing quite a good fanfic, but if you really want to make a good fanfic then you will have to work hard to patch up the holes in the plot. 👍 so good luck. (By the way, it would be better to put at least some image for the fanfic cover.)

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