The lines or dialogues are well written and smooth to read. Though there are some raspy parts I can tell you have it a little heavy on describing some portions clearly. But I like how you maintained the flow of the story and its development stable. Keep up the great work, Author! <3<3<3

I like the quick twists on the story which gives the readers a kind of a roller coaster ride kind of type of build up but sometimes the drops or twists are a bit too heavy. Try giving it a bit more buildup. The characters' personality can be seen fairly well through their way of communication and their development are decent but I like it that way. Take your time to review your stories too before publishing, Typos and the likes are alright but it's a little more relieving if you take your time to review your story and not rushing it. It can be a little stressful, so take it in a pace you can catch up. Keep up the good work, mate! <3<3<3

The plot is clear and upfront with well written cliffhangers that always gives the reader the urge to look forward to what comes next and always fills in enough or exactly that the readers are expecting. I like that kind of style and I use the same. The characters are well introduced too.

It is well written and the stories' atmosphere is decent and the element of drama is understandable and stable despite with a couple twists with it. But, all in all, it's a great read that is not too heavy. Keep up the great work! <3

Interesting and refreshing introduction and progression of the story. Kinda reminds me of of the game "Life Is Strange". The flow is creative and fairly thrilling and the portrayal of the setting and the characters are put into heart and emotion.

Interesting plot and theme! A refreshing take on the story and the narration is lively and so are the expressions! Looking forward to read some more future updates to come