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Okay so here is my review about the story Updating stability : Excellent. Writing Quality : Nice and simple, Almost no Grammertical mistakes and writing capability of author is improving with each chapter. World Background: Can't say much since it is at start only. Story Development:Nice and good plotline though inspired by "The Novel extra" , but few things are better than that novel like Time being given to develop side character, one of the negative point of THE is it was all about main character, each chapter becoming main character this and that and did not have a satisfactory ending. Few advice from me to author though please refrain from giving way too many skills to main character reader tend to forget if there are way too many skills in mc disposal and becomes confusing. And most important of all sometime main character need to suffer a loss too. Mainly because we know that a main character who always win becomes plain boring. Character Development: Main character : Firstly I need to tell that he is not very righteous. Biggest example of this is hollberg massacre where he let innocent children die to achieve his goal. So he is not my type of ideal main character where I prefer Smart and righteous type of main character like Mc of Lord of Mysteries. Second he is somewhat a type who wants basic control over everything now this exactly is not negative point but not exactly a positive point too. Since if something changes he somewhat seem to me type to panic (This is my opinion though can be wrong) Few positive point are High battle Iq. Know his weakness and strength He is smart And many more As for other side character they are good. That all for review overall novel is going very good and Author please keep up the good work.
Author sama thanks for the chapter. Am I the only one who think Ren overdid this somewhat, he directly did this to direct heir of a powerful person, just imagine if Jin takes it negatively and rather than going after him he goes after his family, rather than Jin he will end up becoming a chesspeice. This monarch indifference is truly a dangerous means very very dangerous it made him not to consider his family . Well we are only hope Jin will target Ren not his family otherwise the main reason mc decided to stay hidden will go in vain Anyway Mc be like I hope this doesn't come and bite him and the next moment Kevin enter and sees him Well we can only burn a incense stick for Main character now and pray
Author sama thanks for the chapter and sorry for having a blasphemous thought (LOL)that What if the one who killed Jin is Ren dover itself ? Anyway I can see a good development for Jin, maybe he will stop looking down on other and do a thorough reality check on himself This chapter is no doubt a very good work Keep up the work author sama
Firstly thanks for the chapter author sama My opinion though mc made a mistake in keeping quiet about hollberg massacre, like many might say that who will believe him at all or no one will believe him etc but just like in tea party thing he could have said about the incident through his connection in black market to concerned people without revealing his identity at all. Though my opinion Because I am somewhat seeing a contradictory mindset in mc like he is not able to come in terms with himself killing other people but he somewhat allows the villains to kill children of 16 years just for so called development of novel's main character which I feel he could have avoided it More points which I remember that mc discusses in one of the chapter how mc judges parker's head is villain as he is Assassinating the children of 16 years but he himself allow it to happen it to happen so the question arises how will he judge himself as a villain worser than Parker or simply as a author who will keep giving excuses like this is important for development of character in novel, etc . Though the death of Jin was the best twist seen as I can see mc might try to change the outcome. Now in my opinion plot is becoming better with each chapter but mc has downgraded in my opinion.