Zizinho21
One must imagine Sisyphus shrugging. Diagnosed Schizoid and insomniac.
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The SI wand, how, quaint.
This author repeats the same dialogue sooo many times
They've had this convo like 4 fockin times already
Hero complex AAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaagh
I prefer it this way, I've read thousands of fics for dozens upon dozens of stories/manga/anime/movie/games etc, and having characters react in scenes I've seen over and over again gets boring sometimes, someone not caring and taking a nap is honestly so real and different, I'm with it.
What other comment said, also rasengan is in my opnion kinda useless unless you modify it. Kunai will kill just as well and is throwable, so why bother with the chakra?? You might as well put an explosive tag on a kunai and that alone makes it better then normal rasengan by a good amount.
best guess is that lvl 15 is the bare minimum for an elite
I don't think you should, for example mcs interactions with Temari are plausible enough, funny while keeping the story humorous and relating the plot, all this while keeping the 'mature' edge we expect in your stories. When I'm making a piece of art, or coding or really anything I care about, it usually takes at least three iterations of anything until I think it's good enough, that is to say, I believe you should just rewrite/alterate a few parts you're unsatisfied with, if you are unsatisfied that is.
Re-reading this after like 2 years, still find this whole stripper club part with naruto, and sakura and really weird, they're 12-13 or something, really out of character an plain unnecessary also gross all around. Would've made more sense if kakashi came along with the bridge builder...
Almost like your very own Serosh.
Anglo-Burmese Wars
Just say rest bro, no one just sleeps "for three"
??? I mean I guess he's known him for like maybe 2 months but that's still crazy
Far too few, where's my courage the cowardly dog Self-Insert?!?!?! WHERE IS IT???
Yuri in harem automatically makes it not harem and in some cases ntr. It's either polyamory or open relationship, harem is historically and by definition given it's origin, not that open, nor 'inclusive.' Might I add that I do find harem fics, books, etc disgusting but, I agree with the statement "Yuri in harem is NTR."
Get the rights for the image and names of all the aliens, make a business.