HGB

One punch man + Sung Jinwoo

It's great so far !! Read till the current chapter on another account, and I have to say I've taken a shine to it. While the writing flows a bit iffy in places, for the most part, it's good. Decently stable on the updates which is always a positive thing. The story development needs some work, I'd reccommend going back over what you've written because some of the logic feels off. I like way you've done characters, and I always appreciate a good xinxia world with cultivation and whatnot. All-in-all, I'd say this a worthy read thus far !

Obligatory 5 star review. Any questions I'll answer here. Not that I expect to receive any :p My writing isn't that intriguing. Hopefully some find it even slightly enjoyable, though

Your descriptors are fine and more than dandy, at least for my tastes, but it reads like a list. Ex. They had a small figure. They were crouched in a bush. Their hair was black and so was their eyes. They were youthful. etc etc To state the obvious, your writing isn't exactly like that, but I feel you get the gist of what I'm saying. Ciao !

I have, yes— but that isn't to the level of degrading the man to an object. When a woman says 'my man' they are showing that the man is tied to them and them alone, showing a possession over them. Is a parent saying 'my son/daughter' objectifying the child? What I'm talking about is woman being seen as dots to be checked off, objects that hold their only value in that they are pretty and mostly not for their prowess. Feel free to think what you will though

Perhaps you could elaborate or provide an actual reason? Ex. Spears are good at keeping enemies at range, and are easier to learn and use in the short term—all you have to do is thrust the spear head forward. This is just a quick example, but you should get the gist of it.

Rejoice, rejoice! For a miracle has been bestowed, a Main Character with a modicum of intelligence. Though, he probably should have used it earlier—with how caring his surrogate parents appear to be, they would no doubt have cracked down on the issue if it was brought to their attention.

That still doesn't change anything, though?

Back when I wrote this, I meant to convey that it would look ridiculous. Though, I failed, causing this misunderstanding.

I just don't get why women are viewed as objects to be obtained in so many novels on this site.