Thanks

First chap is a bit confusing with the narration, but it's pretty good apart from those issues

Furara, there is a time to do free hand and a time to use a staff to obliterate a demon general. Trust Hanjiro for once

let me hand you a power stone

How did you do the italics

Furara is adorable AAAAAAAA

"Yeah I'm hungry, what are we having for lunch?" Answer: You Two

Need more of Furara, especially her breaking out of those robes.

I would prefer if you added spaces in between dialogue for easier reading but all in all, this is pretty decent man!

it isn't a grammar error, don't worry! it's something wrong with my head for even imagining it given the context

Either this sounds wrong or I'm just really really messed up

I will attempt to be the first comment in this chapter because I can : ) also, I think this chapter is great! I can see why those reads poured thanks to all that quality

Anytime madame, was a good read after all and it deserves praise :)

Funny, lighthearted, and enjoyable. Man this book hits different, but to be honest it has a lot of things it has to improve on like its grammar and the way it presents itself. The narration itself and the way the narrative is presented was good with the switching perspectives, but I don't think replaying the same scene serves the purpose that well... not like I could say much about that in my book, but all in all this has been a pretty stellar experience

who killed Tyre?? wait who was Tyre?????

I love how she fails to insult mid-sentence

this could have been shown through their rooms, but I guess this does serve it's purpose

I will be direct to the point here... I see the effort, but readers, where were you? Seriously though, this book deserves way more reads than it should have. It's light, crisp, and good. While it isn't quite original as other concepts or aspects, the way it is presented, the manner of characters bouncing off each other is just a nice taste. This thing is the Pringles of story writing so where you guys at?

slick, real slick here

Jin Ae sounds like a person I'm gonna like for real. this made me wonder if I would've been more like the male lead had I taken psychology instead