IamBoredGuy
I am so bored.
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-Be me, a popular singer-messaged by a talented kid about colab-Accepts thinking we would do awesome collabs-Talented kid wants me to smuggle him outside gang territory for collab-Wat do I do???
Do you mean mainly lewds instead of plot? Then no. I think your current strength is the tasteful and comedic prose, not lewds, though I think that one Cyberpunk chapter where you Co-Authored with your wife was quite good.
What would happen if he plants sharingan in his eyeholes? Hahaha.
Bodyguard? Come on man, if he starts taking companions to missions I'll be so disappointed. I thought it was supposed to be used as a trainer or something, cause there's no way that superhero kid wouldn't have created someone strong from his past missions.
Why? How did he break his mental limit? By holding back doing something stupid? Come on man, I would've accepted it if he was under torture or something. The story is interesting but the MC and the obvious plot armor is making me reconsider.
Based grandma.
This is so random lol.
Good fanfiction for now. Even I can tell a forced plot when I see one. If it's repeated too much just to cater to YJ's plot then what's the point of writing ff if the author isn't going to change anything? As for writing, not everyone has free time to write garbage like you.
Tbh, the chesire situation and this pointless drama is making this fic look mid. What are you doing author seriously.
Battle of the bàstards will have a new meaning.
This story became a mess. It had good premise but its too all over the place.
Last part made me feel the Stoicism. Stoicism aside, I think you could've delivered the fallout more impactful if you gave Elia a POV. I knew it was coming a mile away when they already had a kid without any meaningful moments(Like a normal couple should), but I am kind of left disappointed at MC's reaction. Maybe it was just the writing but I felt he should've reacted more through his actions like most guys would do after rejection(Grind their pain away). Anyway, good chapter overall, can't wait for the drama! (Assuming your done with the Kingdom Building Arc)
You use flashbacks too much. Just stick to the present, you're making the story progression needlessly complicated.
A normal man in GoT would be boring and frankly a waste of time. He could only survive if he has OP cheats. He would get eaten alive with his thinking.
What? But you said he wasn't gonna baby sit them? Are all these fillers then? What's even the point in him being there???
Huh??? Filler at chapter 4?
This story would be good if the second priority is romance. Man I am disappointed. Will he leave her crew after he reaches grand line or stay and babysit them? He's too strong for them. They'll get offed by Blackbeard later so it could be used for a revenge plot. Please answer author.