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**Shigeru

nuff. as it covers the content but would be better if it has more ;)

Teen Wolf - As it would add a "wiggle room" to your FF, in addition it greatly matches twilight story of supernaturals compared to others. Underworld - it would work as well so long as you avoid the major plot holes of the story itself and at least build a rapport with the underworld verse. HP - many similarities that would help you enrich your FF, problem though is on how you'll build rapport between this two verse. Grimm/Supernaturals/Originals or TVD - hell no! as it would add to many plot/trap holes same with other fics.

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mate, youva' done a hela lota job for this one the only problem is the stability of your update. if you are lacking motivation or inspiration go read a couple of failed FF of the fics you were trying to portray so you'll learn its faults/curves and avoid it ;)

A transmigrated MC with wide knowledge of NarutoVerse (Anime/Manga) with OP OP devil fruit ability.A highly functioning individual as he trained both his physical, mental & chakra since being aware of his new world.Several grammatical errors which can be improved on & it doesn't affect the story or MC progression.Lack of his previous life knowledge &or NarutoVerse utilization and a bit naive for my tastes as he is aware of what dangers lurks in the shadow but still moved with the flow.The exploration of his DF ability isn't being utilize or/isn't being discussed.Word count is too little as well as upload of each chapters which doesn't match the potential of the FF (Above Average), mayhaps, a tactic author-san uses to encourage Patreon (Please be advised that having an established route or known works first is a must before going exclusive which you lack unfortunately).

Above average if you can persists some gram errors &or interactions.Timeline/Year isn't clear. My assumptions is at the early stages of House of Dragon timeline (King Jaehaerys).MC is a transmigrated to Androw Farman with 3 perks/blessing (Ability to tame dragons, Cold weapons proficiency/comprehension & Quasi immortality) the perks aren't informative enough wether he can tame morethan 1 dragons, long life span or hi speed regeneration &or melee or ranged weapons as well.MC is aware enough of the incoming disasters/dangers which is good. MC is highly functional as he trains both his physical & mental capabilities. MCs persona is also an additional boon as he is chaotic-neutral/good which is apt for HOTD/ASOIAF World.There several grammar lapses which can be improved on via proof reading, use of grammar corrective apps/progs &or English dictionary.The story & MC progression are average to fast phased which is quite good to avoid info dumps and have us readers more entertained.Upload of chapter is very slow phased as it seems author-san isn't used to it yet as well as word counta are too low.The world of Planetos (HOTD/ASOIAF) isn't develop or explored yet as we are still in the early stages.

MC is an SI from our earth (which means, aware of several FF's &/or comics/movie/tv/novel series of several stories that include DCVerse)MC is too indecisive/lame. Lack of willpower & intuitive mind even though he has perfect recall and forges mutant power. Too afraid of changing plots due to author lack of creativeness Story itself is a slice of life style of writing & too much info dump (slow MC & story progression). Lack of utilisation of his previous life knowledge & experiences.The story itself lacks author creativity & based on the reviews itself a possibility that author deletes negative reviews.Author has the guts to create a Patreon even though the story/FF itself is like a batman origins side story which is quite laughable xD

Below Average (I don't recommend)WQ (3/5): Several grammar lapses that can be fix. I refer using gramarly app/prog or reading English dictionary to broaden your vocabulary.SD (1/5): Poor portrayal of returning back in time as he didn't do shit and still abide in the canon timeline. No changes whatsoever as he treats himself as a side character or observer.CD (1/5): Lack of characterization; as the old saying goes "age comes with wisdom" which wasn't utilize or even use in this FF especially OG kakashi/MC.US (3/5): Below average speed of update that matches the quality of this FF.WB (1/5): No changes or addition to NarutoVerse, same everything and no additional exploration of the ninja world.

This is for Patreon and author is deleting negative reviews.First of this is a reboot of "Spiderman Evolution" by GhostXXX and i don't know if dargamer is his other account.Second, this FF only has its initial chapters to entice you to his Patreon.