ThatDogHachiko

I was a big fan of the Prince of Persia games! So that is where i got his acrobatic swordplay from.

Ya someone else also pointed this out and i agree. In my head I picture him as taller than Kirito and Asuna, so I’ve changed his height to 5’9.

Thanks for the review! I understand the frustrations and i don’t claim to be a good writer. Yes the story follows Canon. Mostly because I’m not very creative, but also because it’s what i find enjoyable. The reason he lets the Black Cats die is because he warned Kirito, and wanted to show him thay things have consequences. Its also supposed to be used as a hint that hes not necessarily the way he makes himself seem. But like i said I’m not a good writer, so yes this was poorly Executed. sorry! As for the backstory, Yes i purposely skipped it because i personally get tired of reading peoples origin stories before i ever find out if i like the story. Which seemed to benefit you, as i assume you’ve already dropped this book and probably won’t see this response. Also i planned it for backstories. Also SAO LN literally starts with Kirito on floor 70 after they enter the game. And besides a Quick monologue from him we don’t know anything about him, before we are put in the game. I jusy figured people would be like me and want to get straight into the action, over a full introduction chapter. But yes, this story is cringey, cliche, poorly written with no proofreading. Sorry this story wasn’t what you were looking for! Good luck in the future.

Ya, i should probably change that honestly because in my head i picture him taller than Kirito and Asuna, but im pretty sure used Kirito’s height. So im going to go bsck and change it to 5’9 because that’s how i picture him as I write scenes when him and Asuna interact. Thanks for bringing this up!

Ya its honestly just lazy writing on my part. I find writing dialogue being the hardest part for me, i cut corners where i can. sorry!

Fun fact, i actually originally planned for Sinon, but i guess Sugu would have been a good option as well. sorry!

No hes not, hes a single sword user

Uh spoiler kind of i guess. Yes and no. I think as you see more of the progression of MC, what i have planned will make sense.

I’ll definitely think on it some more, but realistically its just to give people an i idea how it works. As im not going to say “boss has 150,000 hp and MC did 5,000 in at 64 of his skill. Thanks though

That’s kinda how i was thinking of it. that’s also why throughout the story he’s never parried against opponents. I’ll try to really think about the skill and maybe update this page in the future with a better description. Maybe even a better name. thanks