This is better I understand a bit better now

Yeah make auxiliary pages I think they will help understand basic things also I would say try adding things like a character proclaimed this or said this or asked or a character shouted after they talk so we know how they feel other than that this has a lot of potential keep up

done everything is reedited

all corrected dont worry all reedited now

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true sorry bout that its a habit lol

i like the concept towards the first chapter which is what ive read so far it is really cool how it has those scifi aspects to it cant wait to read more definitely adding it to my library.

I really love this story and how the concept is i mean wow the start is sad with the girl losing both of her parents when she was only 9 in a car crash and then grace coming to take care of her i wanna know more about grace she came so suddenly is she evil is she the one tormenting the girl so chilling

i have just read the first chapter so far and cant wait to read more really liking the character Kehna she seems to play a big role in the story and is quite funny cant wait to see how this plays out especially how the setting is in Mexico

Thank you so much I will keep pushing to create a masterpiece

i like the concept on chapter 5 like Ko as a character as well it has potential i would say though some speaking bits is a bit confusing but that's pretty much it its a good novel keep it up

I liked this concept gonna read along more but so far it's good and has potential adding it to library to read more. It's a good scifi though

This is a good story and has go a lot of potential keep going man trust me you will get to the top if you push but yeah i really like the concept

I like the conept it's got potenital if it's refined and put into shape it can become a great novel keep going Consistancy is key. It's good so far

This concept is actually dope I like the idea of a chicken no one has done that and I think It will get pretty far in the future. Wooow keep going seriously it's got potential

I like your story a lot its got a very well writen plot and concept keep going trust me you'll get to the top that what I think anyway. Oh and your grammar was good aswell

I really like this it was amazing keep going trust me you'll make it just keep pushing to be consistant and to keep the quality at a high standard

I really like this novel really sad how she is getting bullied definitely gonna read more upload more chapters i need to know what happens next because its truly exciting. WOOOOOOOOOOOOW I LOVE IT !

Thanks i really appreciate it i will continue and get to the top thank you so much

Thanks for the review i really am gonna try the next arc after this is gonna be so good