MorTemTK

I’ll be honest, it’s not that good, a really interesting idea, it actually gave me inspiration for something similar, but the story is basically a diary, and the way it’s written is like a summary of events rather than a story that unfolds as you read it.

Who tf is this?

Not really the same, one is an inborn talent, the other is just other factions favouring humans, if yokai could have sacred gears and had more divine backing, they would be the dominant species, depending on their birth rates. At the end of the day, humans were lucky.

I think it would have been better you wrote out their conversations instead of just writing a summary of what happened, you know the classic criticism of show don’t tell on webnovel. But overall I’m still enjoying your work. I suffer the same problem when I try and write too.

That was so abrupt 😭😂😂

Yeah they kill, but when it’s guards, the killing usually happens during the fight, not after everyone is in unarmed and captured, and I don’t even have a problem with the killing itself. It’s just he was so casual about executing 200 people that bothered me. He was a normal person in his previous life if I’m remembering the story correctly although I’m not sure been a while since I read it.

These achievements are cool and all but I hope this doesn’t become a novel where he goes around looking for them only…

There’s now way his interest will go up while he’s in prison 😭😭

I assume it’s more for assaulting the boars senses

I’m still really wnjoying the story tbh, I’m just trying to give constructive criticism, it’s hard to come across genuine over comments