Deehan_66

Its was a fresh and unique start... Bt for this genre, FL is dumb, innocent, muddle-headed...She is easily manipulated... Someone copied her novel to do murder, she became the prime suspect, her house is monitored by spy camera, she almost died by some car or flowerpot from a building...Still she is thinking, she is hallucinating, scaring herserf...😒 The rltnship btwn ML and FL is dragging... Their rltnship is kind of push and pull game... Which is a huge turn off... Cmon, its not some kind of 'CEO's sweet dumb wife' novel...U should have characters which is beffiting for this genre...

She is weak for my liking....😐

yes, she is... Without him, u would be in jail...😒

gd luck...

Nobody asked u to stare at the boy... 😒

May be u can write something like this: Just like how one has to damage one's muscles to build new and stronger muscles, the evolvement of the soul has to go through the similar constant damaging and rebuilding. The damage Bing Shi recieved from Guan Fei, who was a powerful soul was too much for Bing Shi's rebuilding soul. She got strong enough to evolve her soul while trying to recover from Guan Fei's blow, bt for how long could she keep up? The close she got to the top of hill, the unstable were her steps and the chances of her falling increased with each passing day...

Which country r u from? Is english ur 2nd language?

so u souldnt write 'everytime'...

Whatever u write, it should not give rise to new questions or confusions... Its okay for those scenes where u want to keep the mystery, bt when u r revealing those hidden facts, it should be clear cut and logical...

everytime she rcvd damage from Guan Fei* Bing Shi rcvd the blow when she killed Guan Fei...right?