sherryrivera1967

That was great. I'm glad they were able to help him.

I agree!

I love the details of the characters. I can't wait to find out more about them especially the "bad boy".

That sounds like a really good idea. It would not only help Nate but the rest of the group too.

That was excellent. I'm so glad you were able to write it. I liked the details. I can't wait for more. Thanks!

Yes, he is naive. I agree.

What a great start and well written too. I am looking forward to reading more.

I agree. I love how the friendship has been built up over the romance. I think it will make their eventual relationship more meaningful. I really want that for Todd. He is amazing. I enjoy his other relationships/ interactions with the people around him as well.

I have really enjoyed this novel. I have enjoyed the world these characters have been forced to live in. I look forward to reading each chapter because it has the right amount of suspense. You grow to care for the characters especially Todd. The only suggestions for improvement I will make are for grammar especially the appropriate use of periods and for more detailed character descriptions. I also wish to thank the author for the wonderful ideas and descriptions about alchemy.

This was an enjoyable chapter. I'm looking forward to more in the future.