AusyLust

You’re not wrong, and yeah, it’s simple—in text. But if it’s that simple, why are so many people having the same confusion? What I’m saying is also simple: the way it’s written makes readers believe his “new form” was when he was born. Becoming a magical being at birth—doesn’t that qualify as a “new form” compared to his previous one when he made the wish? If that’s the case, the wish should’ve been activated as soon as he was born. And sure, the later chapters make it work with him becoming a vampire, but it feels more like retroactive patchwork than something you planned all along. If it was planned, the wish scene would’ve had a tone that left us questioning when he’d get his abilities, not assuming he already had them. That’s where the disconnect lies. Readers aren’t wrong for pointing it out—the setup was shaky. The story’s good, no doubt about that, but the difference between good and great is in the details. Keep it simple, bro.

Ain’t nothin’ silly about it, choom. We’re goin’ off exactly what you wrote. If he wasn’t gonna have the abilities right away, then ya should’ve made that clear from jump—like, that’s basic storytelling. Plenty of authors do it, so miss us with that “you’re just mad” energy. Look, people spotted the inconsistencies in the first few damn chapters ‘cause they’re there. Ain’t nobody reachin’ for it, you put it on display. Go back and read it yourself—not as the author, but as a reader. You’ll see it. You wrote it like he’d have his abilities from the start. Talkin’ about “change in his very essence” and all that? That don’t sound like a slow burn, that sounds like he’s already built different. Don’t gaslight the readers ‘cause they caught you slippin’.

EXACTLY!!

Reading this has been a headache idk why authors on this website follow this trend of having their Mc suffer after suffering….it doesn't make a good story or readers care for him more or his story…sometimes it does the opposite.

He said full-grown adult. He didn't either pay attention or know the Mc was 16. But you have to admit it's a bit sad, having the Mc get pushed around by a cat ( I get the cats powerful, it's still a little annoying to read about with how he tends to act.)

WHEN AUTHORS GONNA LEARN NO ONE LIKES A BITCH

Probably an excuse so when characters look down on him, the author can claim they have a reason.

Talkin’ about “originality” when you can’t even tell style from spit. Yeah, I gave my words a lil’ tune-up to get that Night City flavor, make it sound like Stan Media from Cyberpunk 2077—gives the review that edge, hit lil harder, makes sure it ain’t got that bland taste ppl servin’ up. Still my words, just rephrased to sound like a video game character said it… well typed it. So yeah, maybe not fully original, but sure as hell unique. More original than having it write my words. And word throughout the net is folks like the way it reads ;) P.S. NO TOBACCO, YOU SILLY LOVERBOY! Also, it’s spit out the tobacco as you type—how tf you gonna hear me speak? What a silly loverboy. Lol. But real talk, I get where you’re comin’ from, and I hope you get my point, too… but seriously, was anything I said in that review wrong?………..Guess a little hypocrisy opens a few eyes, yeah?

Scared of a fucken cat seriously not even funny…

Ahhhhh, where do I even begin with this one? This story’s got potential—a real banger, easily top 50 on WebNovel. Grammar’s a bit shaky, but hey, it’s good enough that you don’t mind too much. But then… the author starts hittin’ you with clichés, and the MC? Man, he was this close to turnin’ into a full-on wimp. Glad he finally grew a pair and took out those bastards after they killed the servant woman, but that scene? Just one giant, nasty cliché. It’s no wonder the comments went radio silent after that chapter. This coulda been one of the greatest stories on here, but I think the author’s got it twisted. Just ‘cause the MC starts out as a servant doesn’t mean he needs some grand tragedy to justify becoming a villain. Hate to break it to ya, but this guy? He’s no villain. Not even an anti-hero. Dude watches the woman who raised him get forced to stab herself just ‘cause someone ordered it, and what’s he do? Flashes some “killing intent” and just stands there. Like, buddy, you just got her killed. Could’ve seen it coming a mile away—these people tried to pull something shady just a day before, and he’s still clueless. And then he goes on to snag the top spot in the academy did he think they were gonna congratulate him? Makes no sense. I’ll say it again: even the lowliest servants back in the day knew when to break a rule, throw a punch, stand up for somethin’. Sure, some got killed for it, but at least they went out with their heads held high. They didn’t just stand around lookin’ dumb while people they cared about got hurt. It’s time the author dials down on the “tragic backstory” nonsense and gives us an MC who’s got a bit more grit, ‘cause right now, he’s fallin’ flat. If the Mc story is rewritten, take out a the one big cliche, and think of a creative way for him to gain enemies or become the villain you desire, story is easily up there for one of the top reads….good luck to the author