You have excellent grammar and have very creative ideas for your book's world and characters. Keep it up author. You're doing quite well so far. [img=recommend]

You have excellent grammar and your story has a good storyline. Please continue with your novel since it will be interesting to see how your main characters develop. [img=recommend]

Please capitalize H of the word "hey"...

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Thank you for your feedback. It means so much for someone who had a stroke like i have. XD

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Very good use of the English lhere, Author. Also, your story has a very good start. I was just a little confused about your female MC's name... Is it Marilene or Isabella?[img=faceslap]

Thank you for your feedback. It means so much to a stroke victim like me. 🤗

Thank you for your feedback. It means so much to a stroke victim like me. 🤗

I observed that you have greatly improved in your storytelling skills in this story. However, please find time to go back through your story and improve on your punctuation marks and capitalization uses. [img=recommend]

You can never fake anyone's DNA, unfortunately.[img=faceslap]

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I believe I have read an earlier version of this book and I admit that this is definitely an improvement! Keep up the good work, Author. I will now store your work in my library so I cab continue to see what happens to your MC and his story. [img=recommend]

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Thank you for the feedback. It means so much to a stroke patient like me.,😊

Thank you for your feedback. It means so much for someone who had a stroke like i have. XD

Thank you for your feedback. It means so much for someone who had a stroke like i have. XD

Thank you for your feedback. It means so much for someone who had a stroke like i have. XD

Your novel is a diamond in the rough and the possibilities are endless. However do consider the suggestions that your readers have given you to make their reading you book more enjoyable.[img=recommend]

Try to make longer chapters so your reader will feel satisfied reading your work.