ReviewerAndy

I’ve got my own cat and could never imagine that happening, all the best to you man. Sorry for your loss. Take the time you need.

hide it and be nonchalant

What a waste of potential for a story.

Why is a person with a personal bias being a judge for new adventurers? What a dumb plot.

I drop here.

trueeee, depsite being 12 youd think he would be more mature living in the slums, raising a child and supporting them. Stuff like that would make anyone more mature and smart, but nooo.

If careful is selling all the pills u stole in one place at one time then no ur not being careful.

And this is where I drop. Just garbage character writing and plot that is super forced and unrealistic.

This is actually garbage character writing.

Another example of a cliche approach to characters in another universe, especially ones like DC or Marvel. There is no human attributes, no human quality and no actual human thought to the approach. You develop zero background for the character and make them a blank slate, which isn't great for the reader. The quality of grammar is decent, as seen instantly in the synopsis, however, you can really improve in how you describe the action taking place. Show us what is happening, rather than telling us.