FastestOfAllSperm

There is something bothering me when reading this novel at a subconscious level. It feels like it's missing something. Like what some dude said, everybody is a main character in their own world or perspective. To me, it seems that your characters are like cardboard cutouts. Like it only exist to help the characters. That's their only purpose. You shouldn't have put too many characters in.

My thirst has been relieved. But not quenched! I look forward to more chapters.

Can someone post it in the comments please? Web version doesn't have paragraph comments.

Waiting for this. I AM SPEED!!

Pretty awesome. Highly recommend! Aside from my first reaction on using the name and personality of other characters from different franchise. It was smooth. I quickly adapted to it. Author used characters from different stories but only kept their look and personality, they also fit in the world. However, there are some minor contradictions in technology that bother me at a subtle level.

Healthy body comes a healthy mind. Good luck and take care.

Thanks for the chapter. It seems that this chapter has been duplicated and was posted twice.

I look forward to him interacting with other characters more comprehensively. Thanks for the chapter

A perfect execution of Show, Not Tell. The writing is very concise. It gives a lot of information and details in very few word. Your writing is very brief but comprehensive. I'm jealous of your diverse choice of words and the knowledge on how to use them. You write these scenes masterfully, like when he calls or mentions someone, you either know that character through the original medium or if you don't, you can derive from his writing what kind of character they are. Your style of writing makes this story very interesting. I know this is my second review, but when the double digit chapters were released, I saw a different side of your writing that I previously overlooked. A mastery in Show, Not Tell, a very concise writing. Brief but comprehensive. I couldn't not write this. Thank you for this wonderful story and I look forward for more.

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