Barry_Thomas

Thanks i appreciate That!

appreciate the feedback! I didn't want to have a large info dump, but towards the end of Chapter 2 the story will take a turn to what the pacing of the rest of the story will be. The 1st chapter I really wanted to capture the type of relationship Ty and his master had as well as explore certain tropes used in Manga, but I was debating on doing an Auxiliary chapter with Information about setting and the landscape of the country, but I think I want to explore that through narration and dialogue. Even though if I don't execute that well it could bite me on the butt. lol

I will be honest and say I am personally not a fan of pirates, but I really enjoyed the way you structured your story and how you plotted it out. You managed to capture that world real well. Good job!

I was hooked by just the synopsis lol and honestly the way you built the world the story is set is was done really well. I am hoping I can get to that level sometime. Your characters seem really interesting too. Good job all the way!

First thing I will say is I can definitely relate to the main character with the amount of the alarms lol All I seen was the amount of Dialogue but who am I to judge lol. . . I did like what I read so far I plan on continuing for sure!

I appreciate the feedback! I dropped this chapter to gauge how well it would be perceived. especially since Anime tropes may not translate well to some people. Shounen is definitely the kind of audience and content i was going for. Once I get to Chapter 3-4 it will get a little darker, but Chapter 2 will be coming up soon!

I really enjoyed the way you structured the writing. It’s a Interesting take and different from a lot of other thinfgs I have read before, but in a good way. Keep it up!

Thanks, I appreciate it! I am following those famous anime tropes lol