Benoit_Valtin
I pay author for story creation on old universes, charmed, dexter, highlander, buffy, smallville, stargate where the main hero is a reincarnated Frenchman
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yes I knew I wasn't going to last long on this story, (c03) the mc has 7 wishes (eight the author is wrong) and two things make me leave the story. 1 the MC is intelligent but risks his life in excess of speed when there is no hurry for him. 2 the mc's wishes are too powerful, from chapter three, we can't imagine the mc having any problems at all... unless we make twd hellish with demons of the gods... because the mc is ultra benefited with these wishes. Personally, the overpowering mc makes me sick to this point, and once again I don't see how an author who has this quality of writing (and who publishes a bunch of images of the mc's weapons, cars, etc.) will be able to render such an exciting story to read.
risking your life in an average state of speed meh, imagine you were wrong because it must be a pool table and not a million illegal money. and I'm not at all a fan of Jarvis in walking dead he already has a lot of cheated stuff there's no need for a virtual straw man. I don't think I'm going to stay on this story for long, it's not starting out wow, even you'll be fed up with it, your guy is so cheated.
there's Justin Timberlake's "say something" video which I absolutely adore and which was filmed in France, at home. in any case, it was filmed by French people lol anyway, I loved that you talked about this clip and that you made Lucas reproduce this clip.
and don't feel obliged to make him go out with all the girls that clarck doesn't touch, a seductive MC ok, but he shouldn't think that with his third legs
ok for rewriting only if the MC is no longer a bipolar. there is more than enough Chinese mtl for that, no worries for a seducer on the other hand, it feels good. and rather than a brother of Superman, why not just a family friend and they offered to save their young baby too and rather than a brother of Superman. This won't stop the two from living with the Kents, but it will make it less strange for Iol to be intimate with Kara later. Why do the same thing as everyone else when you can easily get around it!