Pretty good story with good grammar and some fast pacing. Although the pacing is fast I have to say I don’t mind it for this story since for these kinds of stories I want to get to the action faster. That being said the plot is somewhat simple, but needs more chapters for it to really be fleshed out. Overall this story is a good read, keep up the good work Author!!!!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

Fanfic has decent grammar with few mistakes here and there with improvements in later chapters, even with the mistakes it is still easy to understand. There are a lot of time skips and it certainly feels a bit rushed, but overall I enjoy it just fine even with its little mistakes. Keep up the good work Author!!!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

Very enjoyable read with the grammar that is slightly off in some places but easy to read anyways. While I wish the chapters were a bit longer for my tastes, they are fine as they are, overall I would recommend giving this story a read. Keep up the good work Author!!!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

The grammar is perfect and the story is fun to read, and makes me laugh like a crack head sometimes. I just wish there were more chapters to read. Regardless if this ever gets updated again, keep up the good work Author!!!!!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

So far the story is well written, the dialogue flows nicely and the grammar is perfect. The plot is also enjoyable and the chapters are a good length. The updates also are paced nicely. Overall I would highly recommend giving this story a shot. Keep up the good work Author!!!!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

First thing first the grammar while not horrible is off. Sometimes things are written backwards like instead of saying “he walked forward” it’s written like “forward. He walked”. So some things are a little confusing like there are time skips out of nowhere, and things happen very fast. However for the most part you can sort of understand what is going on, the idea of the story is great but the overall translation is just ok. You can try using something like grammerly to help make the sentences make sense but that is not foolproof so good luck 👍 Si

This story is not crazy amazing but it is very solid. The progression is paced nicely (at least for me) and the characters are also fleshed out decently. The length of the chapters if good and the story is updated at a very nice schedule. Overall I would definetly recommend giving the story a read. Keep up the good work Author!!!!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

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Got me curious so hopefully you will continue. ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

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Thought it would be pure smut but it has some semblance of a plot, to be fair there is not that many chapters out right now and most of the “plot” is just the same as the movies really. So I would give it some more time to diverge from the movies if that is going to happen. Overall while not amazing it is a decent read so far, keep up the good work Author!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

While the characters seem to be a bit lacking sometimes, and some of the dialogue feels a bit forced, overall the story is entertaining, the chapters are a good length, and it is an enjoyable read. Keep up the good work Author!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

I have high hope for this fanfic, it is an intriguing concept that I don’t think I’ve seen in the rare few adventure time fanfics I have seen. Hopefully there are plenty of chapters to come in the future, keep up the good work Author!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

The story overall is pretty good so far, and definitely has the potential to become something great. I just hope it doesn’t get ruined by the dreaded writers block, keep up the good work Author!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

The story overall is a pretty good read, it started off a bit confusing to me. I had a hard time telling who came from where and in general what was going on. But the further I went into the story the more clearer it became. So definitely stick it through until at least 20 chapters if you’re unsure about the story. Keep up the good work Author!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

Translation is perfect there are no errors visible at all as of the time of this review, the story is good and only a tad bit slow for my taste but enjoyable nonetheless. I highly recommend you read this, keep up the good work!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

The story is pretty good but fair warning it does contain r*p* so if it trigger you then don’t bother reading at all. The lemons are not bad, but I skipped all the ones containing r*p* so read at your own risk. Overall the story is decent and I hope to read more in the future, keep up the good work Author!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

The story is a good one and I love the premise, I binge read over 50 chapters cus I like the story so much. The only thing I got to complain about is that for some reason it became some unreadable garbage, I don’t know if this is a mobile glitch or what but I can’t read it no longer.

Pretty good read so far, I am excited for more. Keep up the good work Author!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

It is a pretty good translation overall with a few things here and there that don’t make sense, but they also don’t make the story unreadable. This is a pretty good read so try it out. Keep up the good work Author!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………