this story is awesome!!!!!!

Simon?

it seems there's a typo in this paragraph

before it was 2 minutes right ?

more chapters please

first of all,I'm no expert.this is just my opinion as a reader.author you are doing a good job writing the scene.but you are dragging this scene across multiple chapters.your description of the situation paints a vivid picture.but i think you should add some sounds as well.like moaning sounds or something.because after a while just readers will lose interest in it.

can you add more details in the character list?atleast add affiliations. It's hard to keep track.and maybe something like a relationship status at least?ex. lover, friend, enemy, etc.

if this is the way the story will keep going, then the author should put the ntr tag.

where's the MC?

please pay more attention to the punctuation marks. if you don't then Readers might lose interest even if the story is good.

An I mistaken or did he just give away his real name?i thought he said his name was yang yan or something to keep his identity secret.

Author, can you add an auxiliary chapter with power levels

just to confirm...no one from zhang clan has seen mc's when he posed as an alchemist right??otherwise wouldn't they recognize him after he suddenly left from there

More chapters please

take your time author...and I'm sorry for your loss

more frequent chapters please

more chapters please..... i've been waiting for a good TODAG fanfic for a long time.