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I'm a young teen that has too many ideas in his head that makes it hard to write, but I do it anyways because I'm a dumbass. I also live in the stupidest country.
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Alright.
Both. I am unsatisfied with the story, and know I can do better. As for the system, I have realized it's a bit too... much for me personally, and too much of a word/number dumb whenever I display the status. It will still be there, but I will optimize it.
Ugly? Well, you see, Kai/Elliot was never ugly. He just has so little self worth that he genuinely can't look at himself objectively. Not to mention the face was once the previous Kai's. So he feels guilty about that too. Remember, Azula called him cute. And there's also the fact that there really isn't anywhere to properly bathe himself when camping out in the forest... and, yeah. I will keep the Toph pairing. And I also will tone down well, uh, depression. It'll certainly have flare ups, but he try his best to stay positive in the rewrite, even if that doesn't always work.
Honestly, spirit stones make me nervous, and feel guilty. Comments are what makes my day.
I'm going to rate this story as five stars. Because I'm really proud of it, guys. I wrote this with all my heart. This is the most motivated to write I've ever been. And I honestly think this is the best I've ever written. Okay, now that that's said, let me explain a bit about the story. This a fantasy story, about one young man named Callum doing his best to save a world that's helped him get through some of his hardest times. It's going to be a bit dark. And there will be action, but not much at the start. I don't know how I'm going to balance slice-of-life and action, and drama, and stuff. So, yeah. This is Eternal Dove. You can ask any questions, I'll do my best to answer. Also, I have to mention, this is a harem. And system. Read the tags.