Just Want to say, this is one of the best Fanfics I have read for a while. OP Luffy early game? sign me up!!! May you continue on your journey of writing good fanfic

Storytelling felt more like Marvel fanfic than dragon ball fanfic. which is very off-putting Otherwise it is somewhat a good read (bearable)

Truly, this novel that has come into my possession is amongst the greatest literary works that I have had the pleasure of perusing in a considerable span of time. The comedy is masterfully crafted, the romance is tenderly depicted, and the story as a whole is of the highest caliber. It is with great conviction that I endorse this novel to any and all who may come across it.

First and foremost, the plot was riddled with repetition. It felt like I was reading the same scenes over and over again, with only minor variations to the dialogue or setting. As a result, the story failed to maintain my interest, and I found myself skimming through pages just to get to something new. Another major issue was the lack of creativity in the writing. The author relied heavily on tired tropes and clichés, and the characters felt flat and uninspired. It was particularly frustrating to see the main protagonist and heroine constantly referred to as "handsome" and "beautiful" without any real depth or nuance to their personalities. But perhaps the most frustrating aspect of the book was the confusing world development. The author seemed to have a lot of interesting ideas, but failed to fully flesh them out or connect them in a meaningful way. As a result, I found myself struggling to keep track of the various factions and their motivations, and ultimately felt disconnected from the story as a whole. All in all, while the book had its moments, the issues with plot repetition, lack of creativity, character design, and world development left me feeling disappointed and unsatisfied. I wouldn't recommend this book to others, and can only hope that the author will take these criticisms to heart in their future writing.

Take a break my friend and have a nice break

The story is so funny it makes me laugh silly.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

This is one of the best fanfiction stories out there. Despite the plot hole, the rush ending and so on, the story still delivers enough entertainment for the reader. So 4.6 from me.

I like this story. While the plot is a very cliche for some people, I find it very interesting. The MC is very shameless(like most Chinese novels). The author also adds "science" albeit just a for comedy purpose.

let's do this

I keep forgetting that this is DXD fanfic lol 😆~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

The plots are what you would expect from this kind of genre. While it is not bad, the story needs a proper proofreader/editor. Not only that but sometimes there is just too much detail in each sentence reducing the quality of the story. For now, I can't recommend others to read it.

I have been reading the mtl version of the story and I can say that the concept of the story is very interesting, however, the story is ruined due to the over the top racism and toxic patriotism. The first 300 or so chapters, while containing racism, it is still bearable. After that, everything revolves around all Americans hating the Chinese. So I really can't recommend this book to others.

Pls more update🤣, and here are my stones

could be better if not for the characters name(lol). Other than that, there is nothing I can comment on as there is not enough chapter. For now, I give it all 4.4 stars.

Promising story here by the author. My only complaint is that the low frequency of updates😆. Hopefully, this novel will be as good as your other one.

Not writng apps but you can use grammarly keyboard for writing assistant

Wow never thought I wouldl see someone creating Yumeiro Patissiere fanfic. Keep up with the good work.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Im a fan from the other side and i can guarantee those that this story is superb (except for than rang d🤣). Other than that I recommend others to read it.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]