I apologize for the inconvenience. I will see what I can do to make it easier to read through. Thank you for the feedback!

Thank you for sharing this story, I think it's incredable. Your word choice and sentance structure creates quite an incredable atmosphere that pulls you in to the story and grips you tightly! I have not had a chance to read more than a few chapters, but I am definately enjoying the story so far and look forward to how it progresses.

A charming story with engaging characters. There are a few sections where the sentances are a little choppy, but it's otherwise engaging and fairly easy to understand. Definately a good short story for a refreshing binge read.