Willie_Jackson

This is probably my favorite chapter so far. It's nice to get the perspective from the other girls in Evius House regarding Scarlet and her developing situation she's totally unaware of at this point. Makes me think they'll play a role along with Scarlet's friends when everything hits the fan with Scarlet's latent shadow powers.

I have to say you're doing alright with this so far. I'm definitely interested to see where things go in the symposium arc. I'm digging how you're developing the world of this story before you dive into the juicy stuff. The imagery you pulled off in the resonance trial was something I can picture in my mind.

Not a bad start to this one. A magic academy with dark secrets is right up my alley. Not sure what to make of Akari yet but a "bad girl" as the lead is an interesting concept. I also wonder what role Reina will play in this world you're building. Can't wait to see how this world develops as we get deeper into it.

You have a good story going here. I've only read the first nineteen chapters and I'm digging the world building. Sera is a character with high anxiety in the worst situation possible. I can tell this is going to be one hell of a ride. This is good so far and can't wait to read more when I get a chance.

I loved this story and the way you developed Brene as a character. I liked the way the cast plays off each other to create this world you imagined. The payoff at the end was sweet. Your world building is something I'm striving for in my own writing. Every chapter had me hooked from start to finish making this one awesome read. Well done from one writer to another. The one thing I liked the most was your way of using the leylines to enhance the magic of your characters and as a power conduit for that crazy battle with the wraith. If I had one small suggestion, I would have made Ben and Kiarr semi corporeal when they were summoned in the story. It would've made things simpler for Brene but that's the writer in me seeing your incredible story playing like a movie in my mind. Other than that, no complaints. I enjoyed it and can't wait to reread it in the future.

Okay, I'm loving this story. One of the best reads I've had in a while. It's fun following a double isekai from different perspectives. However, I do want to make a suggestion for when you continue: when you switch characters when writing in first-person, let the readers know which character is talking through that section. I found it confusing at times not knowing which character I'm following. Can't wait for you to keep this story going. I for one want to know what happens next. For a personal touch, Reire is my favorite character along with Viola.