NinjasEverywhere

I will only mention something negative since i can't bother mentioning all the positives (which is a lot more). Imho, you use the name "Alex" way too often. Alex thought... Alex ran, Alex didn't, Alex wished etc.. Just count how many times you use his name in a single chapter. I would suggest you use 'he' or 'I' more often. And as he ran back... He thought that was all but... etc I couldn't believe my eyes... I wonder if thats... etc Instead of Alex couldn't believe his eyes, Alex wondered if thats... etc Just a tip from a reader, thats all. cheers

numbers are inconsistent and where is the system all of a sudden? I haven't seen any stats for over... 70 chapters?

So many red flags everywhere... sigh

LIN FENG!

It's: Disciple greets master.

Yh true, but he can get this deal right now, probably without much risk, or he can try to maximize his benefits but with more risks probably. What if he gets robbed for example?

Because this was my first novel and more of a learning experience for me. Pls let me know what you liked and didn't like about this novel so I can learn for my next novel! Thank you!

Hi, my apologies but I dropped this novel. This was my first novel and a learning experience for me. I dropped this because I wasn't satisfied with the story myself and it didn't really get much attention. Plus, I really really really wanted to write another story which I'm working on atm, but will only start releasing when I have a lot of chapters ready so I don't have to stress about release rates. I was writing this story as a complete amateur without any preparation what so ever and I made a lot of rookie mistakes and thats why I dropped it and take this learning experience with me while I'm writing the next one. Anyway, I'm really sorry but just can't find the motivation to continue this one.