JustBael

I would go back through and make sure whenever someone is speaking that it has quotation marks around it

No problem. I know it’s good to catch that stuff early. 🫡

It’s great so far but I would go back and check on the grammar. Several of the chapters call Astrea a female even though the synopsis explicitly states him as a man.

How are you going to keep updating it and adding chapters but from chapter 10-238 there isn’t anything in the chapters to read except for a few letters.

How is this chapter even 18+? There’s nothing in it that is sexual in anyway that would require an 18+ tag

I’ve read most of your books and this is a really good one. I’ve been here since you wrote Vampir and was just wondering how long the hiatus was going to be.

Probably should learn the placement of chapters. How is it that he’s supposed to be saving Eva and then the next chapter he’s having sex with her and then the next chapter is her getting rescued. It doesn’t make sense

Why not show the health value? Even if it’s too big then you can always abbreviate it.

Can you also give the chapters actual names?

How are you going to say at the end of the chapter that his journey to the capital is going to start tomorrow when you said at the beginning of the chapter that it was the day he was supposed to leave. You’re contradicting your own story.