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Read to chapter 20 for reference. My main issues and issues he reasons I stopped reading are the gramatical errors as well as the main plot so far. The MC is ok not the smartest but not the dumbest either just really lucky. The plot is he wants revenge for being left to die but his focus is all over the place instead of on getting stronger. Also the world building is lacking severely so far. The weapon of a needle made of silent thread is unique and goes nicely with the lighting aspect of his artifact. Was waiting to see his nexus but he started to get side tracked so I stopped reading. The dialogue also feels forced and doesn’t flow like a real conversation would or should at least wish you luck
In the free chapters MC is not an antihero. I didn’t read further because nothing grab my attention to make me curious enough to pay to read further and that is my personal choice as it was yours to buy a book beforehand. When there are literally thousands of stories on here you need something to grab people’s attention to get them to want to read. It didn’t get my attention due to lack of worldbuilding as well as no information from n how the system will work later in the novel. If it follows every other zombie system then it would get boring and repetitive I would like to know in advance that is all
Me to I think they meant to say is such a win but they put whim as in whimsical
Martial arts not marshelarts is this a a wild west story
When did he gain shapeshifting
I notice you repeat paragraphs at times let’s not do this to increase word count in a chapter it’s cheap and lazy
Since this story is over a year old and the grammar is still not fixed I will pass on reading this one. If you care about your story edit your work and make it best you can. Almost every sentence is messed up. Going from his/him to her or their. Changing perspectives mid paragraph. Random grammatical errors everywhere
Play all day to get my moneys worth
Why do you keep saying hard work money. Hard earned money would sound more natural to English speakers.
Read what was free for a reference point: writing quality is good as far as grammar goes. Can use some editing to fix small mistakes and clarify things better. At times the same thing is repeated over and over adding no new details to further the story just the word count. World building is going slow but progressing but at the same time a lot of details are skipped or glossed over in my opinion. The main character has no developments yet as far as getting attached or invested in his adventure for answers. Wish he would have eaten someone by now or at least used his new skill. New story so it’s hard to speak about update stability but there isn’t over 50 chapters yet. Wish the writer luck with their story