NetoXIII

It's a great read, a very interesting idea, but it's not for me, there are some points that I don't like, the interference of death and the fact that she doesn't like immortality, it's a magical world so there is the possibility of immortality, I think it's shit she makes plans to get rid of those who seek to increase her life expectancy.... I also didn't like the fact that he wanted to do everything alone and leave Fleur behind

Very good, very detailed and developed story. Your idea of ​​adding Mito was interesting, I also really liked the interaction with Kaguya.

The story is well translated, it has some flaws, but the translation is very good.... Well, the idea of ​​the story in general is very good, the negative points in my opinion are the personal relationships, in addition to being poorly developed, the way How he raises his daughters is shit, how can his daughters go to study and not visit on vacation??? What shitty family is this??? I think you don't understand what the word family means.... Adding the fact that he made his daughters and his wife go through enormous trauma, to shape his personal character, simply what psychopath does this to his family??? There are several ways to teach your daughters and even correct your brother's behavior... Now another point, how come he didn't develop any potion to increase life expectancy, to help his friends? My point of view is that the Chinese are selfish... but I noticed an improvement in these points in some soap operas

Boring... man, I really liked his interaction with Malia, other than that the MC is very annoying... for me the excuse that vampires are like that didn't work... if he was proud and more bloodthirsty ok, so would he He doesn't have to be a psychopath, but he is very passive and disinterested in everything, especially his Buddhism policy is very boring too... Whoever lets his girlfriend go to a party alone... He is asking to be betrayed, when you start to Doing separate things is likely that you will find other people with the same taste, since your partner is not interested, especially if this becomes frequent

Your mentality of accepting low chakra reserves instead of looking for solutions to increase chakra is irritating...Other than that I'm loving your story

very good, I can't wipe the smile off my face when I read it, I just hope he doesn't leave Tsunade alone in the war

It's disheartening, he's very cowardly, instead of training to increase his chakra reserves, he'd rather waste his talent, man, if you didn't want him to fight, choose another world, I'll keep reading just for the romance and I hope you get it fix your cowardly personality.

The story is very good, there were some errors, but nothing that hinders the understanding of the story, I think it would be interesting if he gave some gifts from the frog to improve Hermione's strength, I hope she doesn't get left out of the story after they stay together, it would also be interesting to put some of her points of view

ok, I'll give it a chance... I was traumatized, there are many stories where they separate for whatever reason, it ends up getting boring for me

It was very good, but this interference ruined everything for me... there is also the fact that it will take him a while to find Kumoko, we had high expectations for their meeting, and when that happened they didn't even spend 5 minutes together... I think I'm going to abandon it... but still, congratulations on the work, the idea is good and everything, but I don't like these separations.