Blueflameh

Ahem, I dropped this about a year ago, I’m deciding to pick it back up but I’m rewriting most of it. I don’t have anything planned I’m just writing whatever comes to mind when it comes to mind. I think I’ll follow the plot generally speaking but there will be differences. For example, Furuya, Sawamura and Akira, will they all be on the second string or will they all join the first string? Will they all be pitchers? Will they be the same. Idk man I’m just the author I’m not deciding anything before hand I’m just sending it. If you have suggestions feel free to voice them. If you want something specific then I’ll look into it maybe happening idk man🤷🏻‍♂️

It’s a fairly good story, however as I can see it may be dropped. However that being said it’s interesting. While it may have one or two plot holes that are spoken by the characters instead of being internal monologue most of the story is quite good in my opinion. Overall enjoyable read however it is a dropped story so actually reading as anything other than to pass the time is a waste of time.

The big bad evil of laziness has arrived. The true enemy of all fanfiction

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Hmm I guess but saying your eyes would’ve probably been more convincing.. at least u think so. But to be fair. I’ve been enjoying it so I think the author has so,ething interesting planned with this.

One year later. I guess I should assume it’s dropped? I mean, your early chapters need a bit of updating but more “recent” chapters are good. If you’re going to pick it back up, when you’re resign through it you might as well fix typos or mistakes. If not then I guess it is what it is.

I actually didn’t remember this. Good information to know. Thank you.

Eye roll. Your mc is an idiot. Who wouldn’t start a war if someone killed their child. Ignore rasa. Rasas and asshole.

Anyway apart from this one single thing aka the mc suddenly disappearing and not coming directly back so as to stop a war. I will admit that the story has been good up to this point. So while I’m very annoyed at this decision and the way you’ve taken it. It isn’t because I hate your writing no it’s because I dislike the direct you’ve taken. So it’s from a point of view that your story has been quite good up to this point. Not because I hate your writing or anything so. While this comment looks extremely negative just know I wouldn’t write this comment if I didn’t like it up to this point. Like yeah A would definitely start a war. But you said a year passed or more? The MC isn’t stupid, clearly he knows A would start a war if he was taken. Thats why he wasn’t too worried when he was taken to konoha. However, seeing him run away one stupid move sure it was a reasonable move but okay. Let’s ignore that would could’ve done more in that direction. But let’s look at the root catching him. How the fuck did he randomly teleport? Unexplained and let’s be honest he is already aware that there is probably a war considering he went missing. Well. I mean I feel it wouldn’t been more interesting to see some political manipulation and games here. Until he eventually arrives back in lightning country. But here we are. Your having a war take place over a kid who went missing who’s still alive and should be well aware of the war. And yet he doesn’t feel it’s necessary for him to arrive and stop the fighting. It’s shameful. He’s killing thousands by not showing up. If lightning village pulls out then everyone stops the war. But no. Sorry just a little rant about how it doesn’t make much sense. I mean, to be fair isekai into albarito doesn’t make sense butt hats the fanfic. If you wanted to make a war involving the villages you don’t even need your MC since he clearly isn’t taking part in the war anyways. Just saying I just find it annoying. I guess it gives you an excuse to ignore the Mc’s development with a time skip in a war and when he shows o he has had a massive power boost in ability and based on past comments made in the chapters by you (notes) I’d assume he will also have suddenly have senjutsu. Yeah, honestly if I wanted a cheap way to powerboost my mc that what would do.