aidanbedwell

Am I imaging this or is that pic from Lego Star Wars

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Great chapter!

I do not mind Horikita and Ayanakoji dating, but this is rather fast. MC literately almost killed a guy and had no fluctuations in emotions. He has dated Kei nearly a year in the light novel, but he can not understand love and wounders if he can ever feel emotions. He literately stayed in a hellish environment for all of childhood yet within a day he is already making significant progress? I'm going to stop reading currently, and come back in the future. Hopefully you will make this story more in line with the characters. I know this is a fanfiction, and I know you are probably writing for your own enjoyment, but I thought I might as well comment my thoughts on it. Good Day

I like your idea of Ayanakoji trying to be a nice person, but he is fundamentally someone who doesn't to much. This scolding seemed a bit out of character even in this fan-fiction setting. Horikita also acted to childish she has a backbone, and would immediately refuse what he said with some facts and logic. Sudo also has a lot of pride. The scene of him introducing him self seemed in character as the MC subtly praised him, but he would probably need more of a reason to apologize. I really like COTE , so I am just stating my thoughts and trying to be constructive. Overall I like the premise, and I think this story has potential, but I would suggest you edit some chapters as you go along so the characters and story flow more seamlessly.

It is painful every time he hits the randomize button. I have the urge to get on Skyrim and start customizing my character.

It is not red cedar that brings luck, but redwood.

Wish I could vote, but don't have any stones.