1.- la calidad de escritura es normal, no es muy detallista con los entornos o personajes y sus transfondos, pero no te quita la imaginación detallando cada átomo de su cuerpo. 2.- buena actualización :) 3.- no ha llegado a nada por ahora pero tiene buen ritmo. 4.- un defecto que tiene es la poca información que muestra de los personajes, asumiendo que uno los conoce en primer lugar, esto depende del personaje, no todos. 5.- pense en un principio que el Universo se iba a ir a la mierda en el capitulo 10, ahora parece que podrian coexistir. Buena historia.

1.- It seems to be written at the same time that you are watching an episode of Rick and Morty, everything goes very fast and there is little general information about the place or environment. 2.- in chapter 3 it seems to be in the third person but it is being written in the first person, which is disconcerting, is the boy omnipresent? Or is it you, I don't know. 3.-This is more personal, I don't know how old the author is, but the Smith family and especially Rick are not good people, they are all defective in themselves, Rick is infinitely intelligent but that does not make him an idolizable character, nor does Beth , Jerry is normal, not an idiot, he is normal in my opinion, an average American. The story has its flaws but is readable within the standard.

I have a problem with this kind of story in which everything is given to the protagonist on a silver platter, I don't get through a single chapter after the first 5 of fillers and the protagonist is already a multi-millionaire, I don't want to think afterwards what he'll do with the copy of Cortana. I will wait for another chapter and change the result

5 chapters, 5 chapters are enough to condemn this work to be burned at the stake, don't you believe me? Read this, there is no character development, things just happen, the characters talk like retards and the villain of blade 1 in chapter 5 claims to be from Shield, from that point I said this is dead

At first it was second year, but later I changed it to third year, so third year friend.

Good Bro 👍

Nha, The time chamber is simple to understand and for that I would need to edit the story. It's better to keep it simple in my opinion

It is how you describe how you will destroy it little by little and blah blah blah, honestly I have read many things and reading that led me to a moment where I read very bad Fanfic and they used that archetype of psychopathic villain all the time, I ended up getting repelled by the long sessions dr description of torture, it's not your fault.

I don't understand why the authors of these specific fanfics are so intent on matching children, this fanfic was good until now, now it's just meh...

I almost got a hernia from how uncomfortable and cringe it was to read two full chapters of a rat describing his revenge and the author simply writing in an uncomfortable way.

This fanfic seems written by a Chinese kid locked in a basement, 100 chapters in which basically nothing happens, in 100 chapters only a few days have passed since the story began and that's disgusting. The chapters are made up mostly of random text and things that were made clear before, the author believes that it is a good idea to put 10 women in one chapter at once and the only characteristics that define them are "pretty and big tits" besides that it is Obviously this is plagiarism, I've read enough Chinese novels to know that this was written in faloo or something similar.

Cringelord

the author is a complete idiot, he harshly criticizes the way of acting of the main pardons, which are 10 times better written than his Gary Stu, I hope that really changes, for 100 chapters, it has not been interesting at all, the protagonist is strong but that's it.