Vynris_Foxtail

As of 12/12/24 that is

Fun fact: 1,200,000 Yen is 7,849.09 USD

Won’t lie, even tho it’s filled with sarcasm, it sounds both funny, and does have some bits in it that if taken could be used as a idea to make another story. Not the aspect of Claire leaving them or anything, but idea of a mc accidentally doing something that grabs people’s attention then kidnapped by a group only to work for a way out before getting payback then possibly getting into a whole new ‘world’ of things they never knew existed. Tho sounds better for one where supernatural is hidden behind mundane. But otherwise, so far I do love the novel. Maybe if I understood electronics a bit more I’d love it even more then I do right now. Especially since I like tech and like the idea of tech mixing with supernatural.

You have few spelling mistakes…

Btw before anyone says anything, proof. “I read a book is correct. Red is a color and should not be used in place of read. Red and read are similar sounding words. Such words are called homonyms.”

Btw red is a color. Read is about reading things.

I’d separate them with spaces as the words are pushed together it gets confusing at times when reading, and kinda annoying.

Which* btw. Also loving story btw. Amazing idea. Keep up good work.

My main issue is simply too much or too many random chapters mixed in that basically interrupt the story, and isn’t the story. While normally I’d not make comments, nor would I make a review, but I wanted to say, mostly to the author of this book then to others. This book is good. Has high chance to make it big, but there’s spelling issues that make it a bit annoying at times but that’s not super big issue per say, but the fact that you go and make an entire chapter about asking why your not getting power stones, is something that kinda makes people feel demotivated to read the book. Then adding more chapters, honestly I normally don’t say much. Normally limit my comments…but I don’t like when I’m in middle of reading a book then have a random note talking about something pop up. I wouldn’t mind if it was temporarily there, before basically archived or deleted, but…it’s annoying to look at a book with over 20 chapters but having only 17 or 29 with only 26. Get interrupted even when reading. (I do have a hard time putting words out properly but yeah). Otherwise, it’s a good book, with a lot of potential, and I do hope it continues and gets better. Hopefully you can even fix the spelling mistakes too so that in future you don’t have them or don’t have them as much. Like every chapter has one maybe two. Not big deal tho nor big issue but still. Either way, good job so far, and hoping for the best, and keep up the good work!

I do recommend after a bit of time, at least move this later to the Auxiliary Chapters area. Some people may get annoyed to have this interrupt there reading. (Obviously not all but still). But either way, as said in another comment before, amazing work so far. You may have some things here and there, but better then some of the things I’ve read. And I do recommend slowing it just a tad. As the book does seem a bit…fast, so to say. It’s not bad per say, but it may make it hard for you in future to write more on it, or make some people get annoyed (and I mean some not all). Either way amazing work and keep up the good work.