Jerry070

I don't mind you defending it, but you are defending the argument against the wrong guy. I respect him even trying to write something. I told him that this scenario is not realistic from my view. Now, I have told before it's the author who controls how the novel goes and he should take it as positive criticism. P.S. - Can't control others trolling him though.

Read the previous response again. I said I want the in-between of how the situation became what it is. That's it. And, man, a person realizing they’re in Marvel and stressing out decides to go to some random thug for identity forging? That’s not a mistake, it’s 100% stupidity. It’s like discovering you're trapped in a haunted house, terrified for your life, and then deciding the best thing to do is apply for a home loan to buy the place. But, I don’t care why he did it and I want the part where he made the decision, as he clearly had time. Sorry for the weird analogy, but I just woke up and couldn’t think of another.

I don't need to read a perfect plan getting executed, I am not even having an issue with the fisk involvement part, but how everything gets to that part of the story is the main issue. I mean being a peak human specimen makes you more intelligent and strong. Where is the realistic part through which mc reaches that part of the story. That's what I wanted to point out. My 3rd point was for that. 1 and 2 were just how it went and 3rd the main one. That single thing made me stop because now I know there will be things like this in future chapters of this story.

Answer to your points, 1. Yeah I have, the ones, who does not try to understand the review given by someone, but try to derate every review as to a "too soon" or some other comment if they love or like that fic. 2. As you said there were many ways to do this but this one was not good. Like wasn't he enhanced to peak human level, was mc's thinking power so little that he did what he did. Also, it's not too bad in your opinion, as is mine, about it not being logical as mc was now peak human specimen and had omnitrix, all together a not so logical scenario. Adding all this, the scenario became more ridiculous. 3. Without context to the thing mc does, if you write something, then that breaks the immersion of a reader. Why would reader like a story that does that. Thats what I was saying. Constructive criticism is something where we tell author where he might have made it better. I tried and many agree with me. Rather than trying to defend the story try to see the prespective with which other also see. Can't force author to do something or not do. But, review section is for review. If author feel like it isn't to his/her liking, ignore it. Anyways, that was all I had to say. Goodbye and have a nice day.

Ok, I have seen people like you, so let me be clear on some things, so you can understand why 4 chapters are enough to judge here. 1. He went there to get identity which he can forge by omnitrix's help. 1 thing to ignore, if it was realistic it would have been thinking at 1st step not this. 2. Now rather than doing it right way ultimately he became a crime lord's part time hero. 2nd thing to ignore (now do I have to ignore two things at a time in just 4 chapters?). 3. Now the story will go this scenario till later chapter which will make me remember this part everytime this novel gets in bad scenarios like this. Based on all this, if you think a person shouldn't write a constructive review, then you better delete many reviews in your novel if you ever write one, because it works like this.

Thats more of a reason for him to stop and think about his situation to take clear and concise path. Like man every single kid who has seen ben ten knows what omnitrix can do and you telling me that due to nervousness he goes there, like nervous ness make you do things impulsively but you still got that brain which you can use when you have time. Mc had time and he went for a illegal way to get legal identity. Also, I didn't say he goes to fisk directly, but ultimately he is there.

I don't write many reviews, but I just couldn't skip this one. Like, man, if you're aiming for a realistic scenario, at least try to make it actually feel real. The MC gets an Ultimatrix and then goes to Fisk for identity proof? That’s just way too unrealistic. I mean, of all things, a guy watches TV(however he got the news), realizes he's in the Marvel Universe, feels bad about it, and then decides to go to some random thug for identity forging? Everything was going fine, and then -bam- this happened. I just can't continue reading after that. Best of luck to the author with the novel.

I liked the chapters, but the way the chapters are conveyed is weird. Not bad, but weird, as the mc or any character feels like a poet singing to themselves their own thoughts, or any talk they do. Conversation doesn't look genuine. Feels like the MC is some aristocrat from ancient times who only knows to speak the way he is doing. That's the only thing I want to say. So, try to change or improve that. Just a suggestion, if it doesn't feel food then ignore it. Anyways, thanks for the chapter.

Quite easy to say "then leave" but hard to implement. You can't understand someone's situation if you aren't in it yourself. Desperate situation wouldn't give you time to think, "yeah I should do this". They come and f you up. The whole law and order that we have in governments is for this reason - it tooks years to build. And, MOST IMPORTANTLY it is made by taking every situation into accounts. ["Ghost rider" 's] stair in this, will leave them dead or paralyzed for life, for just small stealing which being a crime isn't worth killing someone. Taking a life or leaving someone paralyzed over a minor crime denies proportional justice and contradicts the purpose of a fair legal system - the same legal system which was made on moral codes, taking every situation into account.

Read before you say something, "not a criminal who kills innocent", didn't say she is not a criminal just that she doesn't kill innocents.