It’s interesting to read my past comments, it gives me things to study. I can see that I really let myself be too human while claiming to be logical, I had logical thinking but mostly inherited by a past version of myself. I let myself feel as an act of boredom and weakness the usual agony among other things, thus obstructing my thought process by letting my flawed human brain take more power. It’s almost fixed.

Well monsters do not exist, when people call others or themselves monsters it’s just that they are unwilling to admit that the thing that make the person so monstrous in their eyes is completely human and and is completely normal. In others eyes I would most likely be called monstrous, I didn’t do much to earn that title but my thoughts would qualify me, I’m not saying this to be cool or anything, it just is.

You can try making one.

Hey don’t overestimate the little bastard’s intelligence, he obviously repeated a few grades.

Beginning by the classic Superman feat.

The Omni man suit, not my favorite but whatever.

Just to add some info Argall lived for more than 9000 years before getting murdered, so they live long, at least his bloodline did. Also only matured and trained viltrumites can hold their breaths for 2 weeks, young ones can do it for like an hour. Viltrumites get stronger by training, a young viltrumite would be a fly compared to a trained soldier. Most of it isn’t to correct you author it’s for those who doesn’t know.

I don’t care enough about her right now, so maybe build a relationship more before making them go out.

Angel Angle

Maybe instead of resilient to mental degradation just a super willpower would be better, because to fight after sustaining injuries like they fight they need to have super willpower.

The easiest thing would be to increase their starting strength and increase their potential, which I’m sure you’re already doing, the reactive evolution fits pretty well with the viltrumite set of power so keep it. I would advise to give them some sort of berserk mode, like their adrenaline is some kind of combat drug, maybe increase their sight, not to put it at kryptonian level but at least make them able to see the guy they punched 300km away, not to make fights awkward, maybe increase their healing factor a bit, because having the mc in a comatose for 6 months might be a bit much, and just to be clear about their healing factor it can regenerate eyes and maybe even limbs, the viltrumites that have limbs or eyes missing had been injured when they were under the weakening effect of the scourge virus, Thragg regrew his eye just fine after it got gouged by Battle Beast’s fang, and Nolan regenerated his spine just fine too. You should probably make viltrumites smart, not super smart but smart enough to have developed spaceships, not saying you should make the mc develop some crazy tech, Robot is there for that. Quite frankly there’s not much to add, Viltrumites are great because of how simple they are, so I wouldn’t go on the trope to give the mc every power in the world, because sure he would be super strong at the end but what’s the point of having the mc being a viltrumite if he get the speed force, mastery of ki, a sharingan and a green lantern ring on top of it you know? It’s too much, too many thing make it less interesting, same with story line and characters, too many things happening at the same time make you care less about each one of them, the most important is making the reader care. For their magical resistance maybe give them something like a resistance that can be developed, like if they get hit by enough magic their bodies just rejects magic or something, in the comics I don’t think magic was a viltrumite weakness. For mind control maybe make them resilient to mental degradation, because if they weren’t already resilient to it they would just kill themselves before they reach a thousand year old.

What you described is just a worst version of kryptonians, not viltrumites.

I don’t know about that, their powers are really different, like Superman doesn’t actually have super strenght or durability, it’s just tactile telekinesis, a forcefield, while Viltrumite are actually that strong. Same with basically everything else, the whole thing with Kryptonians is that they get their powers from stars, because they evolved to be able to absorb solar radiation as a help to feed themselves, viltrumites are just super life forms from the start, no need for radiations. Really the only thing that is similar between the two species is their appearance.

No super senses, maybe they can see better but even that was never said, but things like super hearing were explicitly said to not be in their power set in a throw away line in the comics. If you didn’t read the comics I recommend you read them before making a fan fic of it.

Robot if he was born in Rex’s body.

It’s like if I had to make it clear that casting a fire ball is pyromancy, it’s obvious and redundant.

All knowledge is meaningless and useless.

Is it that hard to write I’m correctly?