I do not like mc op, too boring. The systems displease me, except for some that are not so exaggerated. I do not understand why a god would give wishes to someone who killed by accident, is a god, sh
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The premise is good, the writing is up to par, as always. But the execution is mediocre at best. Any increase in Paul's power feels hollow. You just completely skipped any development of his abilities. What about the silent cast? You'll just have him use it as it suits the script? Will everything be resolved with convenience? Will we have another rushed and anticlimactic ending?
I know the patch looks good on her, but it doesn't make any sense that Hwa Ryun lost his eye xD
It's been years since I've read a decent douluo dalu story. And yours is more than just decent, it's very good. It has good ideas, good execution and even better writing. I especially like the mutation of the white tiger, being similar to the 3 eyed white tiger that Huo Yuhao's son awakened, but with a Sharingan. If I had to highlight something negative, it would be that I personally don't like manhua, and this fanfic seems to be inspired by it. For example, Dai Mubai and Dai Weisi always had a bad relationship in the novel.
Isaac?
While reading this I could only imagine the faces of Paul's haters xD. Honestly, Paul sucks, but he's one of the best characters in Mushoku tensei. I think a lot of the hate towards him is unjustified. I'm glad to see there's a relatively neutral author with him. By the way, there's something you forgot, you didn't mention what Seraph, Eric and Silphy's progress was in these two years.
Frankly I don't love the idea of MC's relationship only with Endorsi. She's nice, but I feel that Hwa Ryun, Yuri and Maschenny are much better(Well, in terms of design and charisma) But I understand that creating a romantic relationship with them is not very realistic. Although I think with Yuri it's definitely possible, not because Baam didn't dare means MC can't. And as for Hwa Ryun, him being an irregular should open a couple of doors with her.
Maybe this is just me, but I feel like the fight scenes are terribly bad. The mc's fighting style is terribly simple and uncreative. Of all the versions of gravity magic I've read, yours is without a doubt the worst. I'd like to believe it's because you're still many years away from mastering such complicated magic. But I'm pretty sure I read that MC had already mastered it.
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Why is it that every time I read a stupid comment, it's yours?
This story is too good for web novel, you should start publishing elsewhere. I hate to say this, but maybe you should open a patreon. Just so you don't lose the motivation to write. It would be heartbreaking if you abandon this masterpiece. All in all, the best Mushoku tensei fanfic.