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Should he seduce mama Nakiri?😏- TEST_3976mthKommentiert
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Here for the harem route. - TEST_3979mthKommentiert
its true that some of us readers are mad because of this my advice is release more chapter for compensation to us for making us wait to long to end a extra background character villain fight
(A/N: I seem to have extended this battle more than necessary. I realized my mistake after re-reading it once and looking at the comments. But it's already too late to change it as I have moved forward with the story. So I can only say that I won't repeat the same mistake after all this is my first story so finding out the mistakes will help me improve. So please continue to provide your feedback in the comment section. Goodbye for now and see you in the next chapter.) - TEST_3971yrVerschickt
all i can say about this martial peak fanfic is that where is the (what if) or big changes scenario in this. Fanfic are supposed to be like that but this is totally a new novel at this point there is no intervention in the story that some of us reader know because some of us stop reading the original novel when yang kai reach (origin king) or in the (dao source) and above cultivation.So my question is any plans on making a knew one because your novel right now is really not popular at this point. Maybe try starting with the fanfic OC MC being brother of Yang kai or someone with an ancient family hidden to everyone and he interact with some original characters in martial peak and have some of his own opportunity to get his own inheritance or steal some of yang kai cultivation and treasures opportunity with hardwork. And for his future companions some OC heroine for OC MC and maybe some from the store that is being forgotten to join OC MC harem. By the way this is just my opinion on your fanfic don't be offended just giving you my feedback and im not really good in English so sorry if some word in my comment doesn't make sense.
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you know the AU back story can be use as reason Hephaestus help them and for the magic sword some business deal to make the for protection and that i think Ares has been confirmed that is with evilus so preventing them from getting magic sword can be use
I'll also be planning a separate love interest for Welf in this fanfic, so the bro Crozzo won't be alone with Hephaestus gone. - TEST_3971yrAntwortet auf Grand_Castor_
I'm not offended at all just giving idea and the author can use this if he wants to make the story longer because some fanfic are really short and rush
I'll also be planning a separate love interest for Welf in this fanfic, so the bro Crozzo won't be alone with Hephaestus gone. - TEST_3971yrAntwortet auf Grand_Castor_
magic sword and fairy blessings and you can make some AU that the goddess is an acquaintance of Hephaestus since she's a goddess
I'll also be planning a separate love interest for Welf in this fanfic, so the bro Crozzo won't be alone with Hephaestus gone. - TEST_3971yrAntwortet auf Grand_Castor_
it's you're novel and its already an AU so you can do whatever you want some novels even made bell a girl i see o reason welf not have a goddess as love interest, and also this is just my suggestion im not demanding changes just helping give ideas for you're novel
I'll also be planning a separate love interest for Welf in this fanfic, so the bro Crozzo won't be alone with Hephaestus gone. - TEST_3971yrAntwortet auf Grand_Castor_
you could have her disguise with an magic item like bell has while they fake her death during the escape because some other god/goddess died during some attack or in the escape as cover up and only welf and Hephaestus and some know she's alive, welf then use Hephaestus falna help to desgise by joining Hephaestus familia with her help in hiding her goddess
I'll also be planning a separate love interest for Welf in this fanfic, so the bro Crozzo won't be alone with Hephaestus gone. - TEST_3971yrKommentiert
you know author since this is already an AU, why not make his goddess survive with him just make her have some trauma because of the death of her familia during there escape, and Welf help her recover and they develop feeling during it, while they are in protection of Hephaestus while welf make magic sword in exchange
I'll also be planning a separate love interest for Welf in this fanfic, so the bro Crozzo won't be alone with Hephaestus gone. - TEST_3971yrKommentiert
author i recommend you just stick with Chinese novel worlds, because you suck in the Japanese novels/anime/manga, you literally made a Good novel/anime/manga into a trash talking idiot characters, and the way they talk are like in Chinese novel trash made copy past novels ripped off.
Ch 212 Chapter 212- Curse killing Magic - TEST_3971yrVerschickt
the idea are good but the why did you make the mc 27 in his pass life if he is so dumb seriously you should have made him 15-17 he has known games and story in novel. Yet he didn't think of creating talent for cooking or some researcher skill to know the ingredients that use in the foods. im not telling that this novel is trash or something just giving you idea that make it with less plot holes because its confusing to me who has read novels that its within logic of idea and yours is in the line of below average but still good, so keep up and improve your novel ether when you make new one or continue this.👍
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1. Tales of Demon and God - TEST_3971yrKommentiert
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1. Battle through the heavens.-1+ - TEST_3971yrKommentiert
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