Will you introduce elements from TDG?

You have commented a lot, thank you :D

Jejeje Just wait.

Yeah, I didn't know how to balance at that time.

Too mediocre

I think it's best to concentrate on the current one. Otherwise, with the little time you have to write, you may leave everyone dissatisfied.

Too many falshbacks, It breaks the pace of the story. It's better to advance the story and create a special arc to tell the past of the prota.

Please new chapter!

Thanks! I'm waiting for today's chapter! :D

Thanks and pls update, I like this a lot!

Thanks!

Why is there no chapter today?

It was interesting...WAS

First, the story follows the canon, but nothing new exists. But the most important thing is that he is just too stupid, at the start he said he had no money, but then he can make gunpowder, so just selling that formula to anyone could have earned him a fortune. Also, he fights with the little fairy doctor, but just by having a good relationship with her he could have earned much more, after all, she is not an alchemist. So I don't recommend this.

I don't know what to think about the protagonist. Why did he suddenly went retard? There's nothing in that cave that is absolutely necessary for his strength, even the flying technique can not be said to be indispensable. As for the map, if he forms a good relationship with her, she's going to give it to him, after all, she's not an alquemist. Finally, did he become so stupid to forget that she's the only one who can take him to the hidden forest?

Thanks, it was good.

Too rushed, I can't enjoy anything. Also, it's too centered around the protagonist and too many details are left out. On the other hand, the relationship with the girl is too superficial.

A piece of &@ _;'?$/$:"-!The relationships are bad, the timing is bad, the protagonist is too broken.

It would be too easy.

Just continue like until now.