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Keith_Sterling_Jr_

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2019-02-16 BeigetretenUnited States
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  • Keith_Sterling_Jr_
    Keith_Sterling_Jr_2yr
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    Yoo keep it up pls

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    End (05)
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  • Keith_Sterling_Jr_
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    Quick thought but do you use a spin the wheel type thing with a list of choices to determine his next power? If not it might be a cool idea so that it is completely random unless the power is necessary for the plot

    Ch 30 Meeting?... Gifts... Back to Reality...
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    The Skill Extractor in OnePiece
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  • Keith_Sterling_Jr_
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    I couldn’t write this earlier, but for future occasions you might want to consider reducing the time period he spent in the throne of heroes. Logically if he had 6,000 years to train with the strongest and combining the thousands of rituals, ceremonies, and treasures the heroes it wouldn’t make sense for him to be so weak even with no talent. In fact I’m sure there is a ritual somewhere to help with talent or at least increase learning ability. 6,000 years is to long for him to be so weak. It’s a good story though keep it up author.

    Ch 6 Chapter 6
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  • Keith_Sterling_Jr_
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    Antwortet auf ThaTRandomGuy1887

    True

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  • Keith_Sterling_Jr_
    Keith_Sterling_Jr_2yr
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    Good chapter just confused on the whole hate thing of issei. It seems excessive especially since they are brothers and there is nothing that should cause them to hate each other. Maybe consider changing hate to a passion to correct his perversity

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    Reborb To Kill (DXD)
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  • Keith_Sterling_Jr_
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    Antwortet auf Keith_Sterling_Jr_

    If u can make it work in terms of plot. That or Law

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  • Keith_Sterling_Jr_
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    I can’t really plus but option 5 sounds cool

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  • Keith_Sterling_Jr_
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    My only comment even though I’m a month late is that the 3rd wish is kinda useless. The phone has informs and you have information about the world without knowing the plot line so the memory is basically serving no point.

    Ch 1 Chapter 1.
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    I’m really surprised. I thought that imperial dynasty’s wouldn’t be a thing at this point. In the background you said the highest power is tier-2 and that there shouldn’t be too many, yet it sounds like he has more than 50 tier-2’s. Furthermore, shouldn’t it have been announced that someone from Earth formed the empire, or is this whole thing a part of the plot that hasn’t yet been introduced. Not criticizing just a question

    Ch 69 Assemble the Entire Army!
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