Alanray64

So far at 20 chapters it’s an ok read. A number of grammar and spelling mistakes but they are not a really big deal, just noting that they exist. The MC seems rather slow in some ways, seems to accept ,everything without questioning how things are or happen to be. When he first appeared in his domain and was told he was forcibly taken, it was more like ok I get it. There wasn’t much other emotion felt. He acknowledged being targetted twice and yet being taken was just fair enough. Still guess that’s how he rolls. Also notice that this has another review done 5 months ago and only 20 chapters? Plus no update in 6 days so not sure what if this story will make any movement. Anyways, shows potential, just need some commitment and a decent storyline to grow into.

..rogue..

Shouldn’t it be … the land within your divine authority… Without kinda means it doesn’t have it??

I concur, a lot of scenarios are dragged out in some form or another. They are still good to read but rather lengthy at times. With every page ending in a rehashing of his beginnings “execution squad” to what ever the focus of the page was on had some interest, but I kinda started dreading the reference to the execution squad. Understand though it still is interesting to read. The other was the tags. Revenge, poor to rich, harem etc? There was no revenge focus that could see, he was gifted by the system 100k gold coins, so yeh briefly he was poor. Very briefly and Harem? No such thing. His summons so far are two females with 100 loyalty, though he has a spare one to call upon, why it hasn’t been used is anyone’s guess. He has met a number of ladies through his work, each described as beautiful but only standing out by the their ability levels. The current Princess Aurora, appears to be positioned as a possible interest but to this point there is no romance present. Potentially he still harbours a deep seated feeling of distrust of being betrayed from His past life, but I don’t think so. As he recognised his failings back then. Still I prefer accurate tags and not bait. Still it’s not a bad read to this point.

Thought it was Vorlag’s brother that died?

At least 3 I think?

Doesn’t drop a name? So asking for some random lady using a sword really narrows down the people there.

So just leave? No message after what he said and done. Any wonder why he wasn’t liked in his past life with such a low EQ.

The loser asks to many questions 🤦🏻‍♂️

Isn’t it Ophelia losing her composure?