Carrottop

Amazing story! The only downside to the story for me PERSONALLY is how Naruto is portrayed. Don't get me wrong, I think the author did an amazing job recreating Naruto's personality. However, it went to the extreme in terms of how detached from reality and retarded Naruto's sense of justice is. Even in the anime Naruto killed people that were trying to kill him. But in this story, he is taking Batman's principles to the extreme! A bandit or ninja is massacring civilians and r*ping women left and right? That's OK, as long as they say they're sorry. They do it again after their "redemption" (aka Naruto gives them a spanking and puts them in timeout)? That OK as well as long as they pinky promise that they won't do it again. As some point the suspension of disbelief hits a limit. At this point, while I absolutely love the rest of the story, I DREAD any Naruto POV narration or any part of the story where he opens his mouth. Hell, I even hoped quite a few times that he gets killed off and the author adjusts the storyline without this insufferable parasite. Author, if you're reading this, for the love of god, please change Naruto's personality, at least progressively. Every time he opens his yap I debate whether this is the reason that Uzushiogakure was destroyed in the original story. If there was a village that has retarded people like this Naruto all around, then its perfectly reasonable for the village to get wiped out for the good of the world.

I'm not questioning that Eywa is real, in the sense that it is a biological planet-wide hivemind, not a deity. The MC is a technological pioneer, but seems to not even try to use science to explain anything, and just accepts the being as a god and becomes wildly religious in record time. I've known people with actual real-life tragedies that took longer to turn to religion then this guy. The technology and science of his world could have been used much more to further the Navi-human integration, instead it is just a backdrop of the story and the story devolved into tribal nonsense. I just expected more from all the initial buildup in the earlier chapters (although I did have a premonition that this will happen when the genius nerd suddenly started acting like a gym-rat high school jock high on hormones, and just hoped that he will revert back to his adult self). But to each his own i guess.

I'm sure that some people like stories where the theme wildly changes from the beginning, but that's just not me. If the MC is a scientific/technological pioneer and keeps mentioning how the various plants and resources can be applied to further science, then the general expectation is that the rest of the story would at least have that as a core theme, instead of a side story that is used as a magical fix-all when a problem comes up. But with this story, that same MC becomes a religious fanatic so fast it gives you whiplash. He doesn't even try to explain things using science, just excepts that the planetary hivemind is a "god"-being and becomes a hippy. The technology was only really used to make the house and some medicine, and then the remainder of the story was just slice of life nonsense. All I'm saying is that if you give certain expectations for a story, at least follow through. Otherwise it becomes jarring.

Author stole multiple fan fiction stories, including this one. Has already been reported and changed his account name from dark789, and even tried to create patreon for someone else’s work. Pathetic parasite.

As of chapter 31, started off great, good grammar, story seemed like it was priming the MC to either develop a semi-futuristic version of a Navi settlement using his technology and genius scientific intellect, essentially being a kingdom building fic, or at least having something more science related. The story could have even gone with a mutation/evolution storyline considering how much it mentioned developing new medicines and the effects of miracle fruit on the body, and it would have become a passible fanfiction. Instead we get a useless MC that virtually abandons the technology and science angle, something that he was an expert in, imprints and becomes overprotective of anything and anyone that looks at him (almost as disturbingly fast as a Twilight Jacob/Renesmee fanfiction), becomes religious faster then a cult member (which is even more odd since he was a tech/science geek), has a forced romance development that can only possibly happen if the two were the only ones left on the planet, becomes whiny and weaker then even Navi teens, and only mentions science sparingly while focusing on learning hand-to-hand combat and hunting.....this is one of the greatest wastes of potential I have seen in a while.

I finally found a naruto fanfic about the aburame clan.....and it's GLORIOUS!!! The comedy, the realism (for a naruto fanfic), the chapter release rate is superb. For the love of anime god, author, please don't drop this diamond of a fanfic!

Biggest issue that stands out as soon as you start reading is the grammar. It's hard to get through a single sentence without noticing the disjointed grammar mistakes. Also, the reviews in this story seem like bots, with the same "people" giving five star reviews with no elaboration.

Great fanfic, amazing writing style and world background. The MC is also very fleshed out and original. The only problem with this fanfic is the chapter updates. Now, I have absolutely no problem with the author taking some time off to refresh his creative mojo, or there being several weeks break between each chapter, assuming that the chapter length is long enough to justify this. However, not only is this not the case for this fanfic, with their chapter length being average at best, but the author keeps on telling the readers that he will be back for the next chapter "soon", only for us not to hear from him for months at a time. This just seems like the author is just stringing his readers along so that his fanfic doesn't get abandoned by everyone completely, or so that it stays in the rankings.

Also, adding chapters from the point of view of other characters for the reader to see their thoughts and reactions is also a great way of extending the series a bit.

Crazy thought, but how about continuing past the ME3 storyline and creating some original content? Seems like this fic can go pretty far and a lot of the story has already been set up from the game, so you can continue with creating a Krogan civilization that spans the universe. Heck, their lifespan is in the thousands of years, there's a lot of content that can be made even with time skips. Some genetic engineering to hash out the problems with Krogan intelligence and adding some more power to their physical build could be a fun side story as well. Just food for thought.