iLeech

Skipped most of the chapter after the system explanation. Repeating the same scene with a different pov change is bad writing. Keep the the storyline linear.

Dunno if you noticed, but you keep switching name systems. Sometimes you start with the family name, other times with the first name. U high?

Where do you think polygamy came from, dude? From some other planet? I even know a guy who has 2 wives. Are you an alien or do you live under a rock? Your society doesn't represent the whole world.

He's mocking your naming sense.

He's speaking for his little bro yo. Get a hint.

Tonikaku,

Sounding more like a creep after each new sentence.

Now she's going to think of her late husband while she's with him. Potential çuck spotted.

"Mommy," said Peter.

Yeah bye bye