Purity_Thogt

As story progressed it made no sense... 1. decisions and actions of characters don't align with each other 2. I know the characters will have plot armor but if in usual stories plot armor is 100% then in this story is over 9000(nine thousand DBZ reference)

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how many times will this same fan fiction repeat............................................................................................................

1.Too much milking out of the situation..... 2.you cant make the pacing of the story start with 100k/h and then suddenly break and then start 2k/h that's just frustrating which is acceptable if the theme is brand new and unique(going back to past with fuinjutsu has been done). 3. and just jumbling up timeline, situation and characters is done slowly for a reason.... its like those movies that try to do too much without actually using anyone completely for ex. what do you need in the novel time travel- check alerted timeline - check emotional drama - check customize characters and situations - check and all this happened in span of 6 chapters that causes indigestion... that's just my rant no need to take anything i said seriously......

top ten most ridiculous things i have read.....