NimbusApparels

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2018-03-27 BeigetretenGlobal

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NimbusApparels4 years ago
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This does not make sense!
"Technically, Harvey, you're the heir now," Gerald then followed, "I am the old fuckers would shut their mouths as soon as you make an appearance."
My Hermes System
Fantasie · Romeru
NimbusApparels4 years ago
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Harvy then cleared ‘HIS’ throat!!
"I… I was kidding," Harvey let out an awkward chuckle as soon as she saw Beatrice biting her lip, her eyes almost finding their way towards the floor, "A… anyway," Harvey then cleared her throat, before turning around… towards his brother.
My Hermes System
Fantasie · Romeru
NimbusApparels4 years ago
Antwortet auf Nesquick45
Apoted into a poor family! 🤣
Tiana interrupted and said with conviction, " I will take that chance, and if I fail, I hope valley master can support the orphanage where I came from. "
The Tale of the Void Emperor
Fantasie · LivingVoid
NimbusApparels4 years ago
Antwortet auf Master_Atlest
Id rather the author took the abuse route instead of the rape route.
"I don't care, Hans," Charlotte shook her head and repeated her words, "She allowed her own son to be molested. What the fuck kind of mother does that? And you're telling Van to forgive her? What the fuck is wrong with you? You're the youngest of us three and you're already going senile."
My Hermes System
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NimbusApparels4 years ago
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I get the feeling that the author is trying to say that getting molested by his father is a good thing!!!
"I don't care, Hans," Charlotte shook her head and repeated her words, "She allowed her own son to be molested. What the fuck kind of mother does that? And you're telling Van to forgive her? What the fuck is wrong with you? You're the youngest of us three and you're already going senile."
My Hermes System
Fantasie · Romeru
NimbusApparels4 years ago
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“Victoria kneeled infront of Paris” Isnt Victoria the one unconsious right now?? Dont you mean Charlotte!!
"Harvey. Don't," before Harvey could finish his words, Gerald suddenly appeared behind him, grabbing his shoulder and stopping him from saying anything else.
My Hermes System
Fantasie · Romeru
NimbusApparels4 years ago
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Stop miXing He/She, Him/ Her. It spoils the immersion of the story and is a basic grammer mistake for a writer of your calibre.
His screams of pain reached even the Encampment, Andrea, who was currently talking with Sarah, could not help but stand up as she stood up towards the direction of Van's voice. However, before she could rush towards him, Sarah stopped him.
My Hermes System
Fantasie · Romeru
NimbusApparels4 years ago
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Do you mean ‘Is there?’ because ‘there is?’ Doesnt make sense here!
Dieser Absatz wurde gestrichen.
The Tale of the Void Emperor
Fantasie · LivingVoid
NimbusApparels4 years ago
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The author said she came from a poor family in an earlier chapter!
Tiana interrupted and said with conviction, " I will take that chance, and if I fail, I hope valley master can support the orphanage where I came from. "
The Tale of the Void Emperor
Fantasie · LivingVoid
NimbusApparels4 years ago
Antwortet auf p1xel
Its 2!
Athan stopped in front of a boulder that was the size 2 in diameter, After getting into a simple stance, Athan threw a punch.
The Tale of the Void Emperor
Fantasie · LivingVoid