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1. killing off your food supply is extremely short sighted. 2. seems his family means nothing to him since he doesn't even consider being honest and trying to find a compromise. 3. why the heck would you turn criminals into members of your inner council? horrible idea. 4. mc is rushing his own "coven". why are you inflating the vampire numbers so quickly? what about sourcing food? this will have a huge impact on society and he's just asking for trouble. justification of point 2: his mother said they would kill the vampire that turned her son, but that doesn't mean she's going to kill mc, so somewhere they will need to get food for him to survive, since they don't know he can live without blood. if he'd revealed himself early he could have recieved a blood bag daily for years on end with no one suspicious and his family not wanting to kill him when they find out. Justification of point 4: they're already suspecting something is up when it was just the mc taking nobodies off the street and now you're adding six to your number. where are you going to find an additional (300 x 6) people nobody cares about without being noticed? anyway story is no longer for me. my reasoning is above.

You know it's really weird that he still says "Miss Death" even when their apparent relationship is very close right? It comes across like someone that is trying to be polite but is actually just trying way too hard. I'd expect, after all these years, they'd be very good friends and would just forgo formalities like this.

question from the ignorant here but what exactly is "The Presence"?

Don't write "he or she" just write "they" or "them". It depends on the context. I'm all for gender ambiguity but at least make it read nicely.

dragons sitting on a barren land wife XD

being a decent human being has nothing to do with your status as a "Gentleman" though...

careful!! we're slowly making our way to neck-beard territory!

A good cultivation novel I recommend is 'Beware of chicken' on royal road. Not your typical "Couldn't see Mount Tai" and "You seek death" junk you find in the clogged toilet. Doesn't follow typical daoist routes but is refreshing for those who've drowned in the brown sea. Might hold some nice ideas for your own works Author. Now to start reading this bad boy.

I dont think that was the right thing to do. He Just did the same thing as Big Mom. Killing people who couldnt defend themselves. I get why he did it but in the grand scheme his actions were no better than hers. That didnt come across as ruthlessness, it felt more like spite. I would have just made him swing his sword to slice all her shIps to pieces. added benefit of culling numbers and serious intimidation. Say a spooky line then begin the beat down. As it stands now, she has all her troops and a belly full of rage. This isnt a complaint, just my interpretation of what I just read.

Why is the word A.d.u.l.t censored???