PrancingPanda
I like reading, If I could I would read 24/7.
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A week in many fantasy settings are also known as a Tenday, meaning 10 days, that could he the case here, but we will probably find out more as we continue to read.
Yes I am immature.
Don't you know? When the Maintenance is finished. Is when the Maintenance really begins.
Just want to let you know I have enjoyed your book so far, I am currently at chapter 30. However you tend to go back and forth with the use of present tense and past tense. It makes the story a little hard and jarring to read. I suggest sticking to one or the other, with past tense being the better choice when it comes to story writing in my opinion. I do hope it gets better as the book continues on, so I can leave a good review.
These sort of sentences tend to be a flag for future betrayal, anyway I guess we'll wait and see.
"what kind of person", would have fit so much better.
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ouroboros
I would rate It a complete 5 stars if it wasn't for the word primogenitor, it's a pain to read and means the exact same thing as progenitor, when I read the word primogenitor, I instantly think of Primo ham. Please just use Progenitor in place of Primogenitor. Other than that, I enjoy the book. I'm not by any means a critic, just that the word throws the whole vibe off of what's happening at the time.
Zeus is lightning and Thor is thunder, so who knows, Zeus could have made the cut.
Him right now.